Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
It is often argued that in recent times people's dressing sense are impacted by world fashion trends. Although, Internet plays a significant role in global fashion which influence on people's lives. From my perspective, it is a positive development. This essay will discuss all the aspects in details in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, there are various positive development of fashion trends on people's lives. First of all, because of Internet people are more aware of fashion trends all over world. This is because, they know what to wear on certain occasion. In addition, people have a better understanding of colour combinations and about fabrics. for instance, on any festival, people know that they have to wear traditional cloths because it is trending to wear traditional dresses on festivals. Another major development is that global fashion helps in developing a person's personality. To explain, people who follows fashion trends may develop their dressing sense which help them to develop their personality because clothe shows a person's mindset. for example, according to a survey conducted by National Sample Survey Office, in 2025, in India, on ten thousand people, it was observed that 75% of people changed their dressing way by following fashion trends.
Furthermore, good clothing also helps to boost confidance in a person. To elaborate, if a person is wearing a good cloths, they will feel confidence within themselves because it makes a person to look govel and motivated.
for example, if a person is going for interview, if they are well dressed, their confidance level will be high and they may feel motivated and energatic.
In conclusion, global fashion trend strongly influenced on people's lives. They feel more motivated and confidant. It also helps to develop a person's personality. Moreover, this trend has a positive impact development on individual's lives all the keypoints are discussed above in the paragraphs.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: how global fashion influences lives and whether this is positive or negative. The position is clear from the introduction. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention the internet and personality development, the arguments are repetitive and lack depth. For instance, the example regarding the survey is specific but does not fully explain the 'how' or 'why' of the influence beyond a simple statistic. To reach a higher band, ensure that each paragraph provides a more nuanced exploration of the topic rather than just stating that fashion boosts confidence or personality.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with', 'In addition', and 'Furthermore'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or repetitive. Additionally, there are issues with referencing; for example, the phrase 'all the aspects in details' in the introduction is slightly awkward. The conclusion is also a bit repetitive, simply restating the points without synthesizing them effectively. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the overall flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You use basic terms like 'good clothing' and 'look govel' (likely a typo for 'good' or 'lovely'). There are also several spelling errors, such as 'confidance' (confidence), 'energatic' (energetic), and 'cloths' (clothes). While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated vocabulary and the presence of spelling mistakes limit the score. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring correct spelling of common academic terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Examples include 'people's dressing sense are impacted' (subject-verb agreement), 'Internet plays' (missing article), and 'it makes a person to look govel' (incorrect verb pattern). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of lowercase letters at the start of sentences like 'for instance' and 'for example'. While the meaning is usually understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and article usage.
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