Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays the global fashion trends had influenced many aspects of the way people dress. Due to the rapid rise of social media it has gained a strong influence over the lives of people. I believed that it is a negative development as it affect the finance of individual as well as it create a fear of missing and it over inflated the average product.
The global fashion trends have a strong hold of the market so it create an environment for costumer where they make bad financial decision. The global fashion trends hype up the market for unnecessary product and force costumer to buy unwanted average product creating a fear of missing out. In fact in the USA a water bottle brand stanly created a fake market hype and sold million of bottles when their was a cheap and better option available.
In addition the global fashion trends also impact the finance of an individual. Many people nowadays tends to follow trends to not be left out and due to this feeling majority of people buy the product that is out of there budget and messed up their finance. For instance of my cousin who just brought an latest i-phone which was out of his family budget and it
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you address both parts of the prompt—explaining the influence of fashion and providing an opinion—the arguments are underdeveloped. The example regarding the 'Stanley' water bottle is relevant, but the second example about the iPhone is incomplete, ending abruptly. To improve, you must ensure that each point is fully extended with clear reasoning and a complete conclusion. The position is clear, but the lack of length prevents a thorough exploration of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited. Phrases like 'In addition' and 'For instance' are used, but the flow between sentences is occasionally disjointed. The abrupt ending of the final paragraph severely disrupts the coherence of the piece. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a logical progression that leads to a clear, completed thought.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'messed up their finance' and 'over inflated the average product'. You also rely on repetitive phrasing like 'global fashion trends' and 'strong influence'. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary and synonyms to avoid repetition and improve the precision of your arguments.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with verb tense consistency ('trends had influenced', 'I believed'), subject-verb agreement ('it affect', 'it create'), and article usage. While you attempt some complex sentence structures, they are often marred by errors that occasionally impede the clarity of your message. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and tense agreement. Increasing the variety of complex structures while maintaining accuracy will also help raise your score.
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