Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The many aspects people believe dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
Overall, the global fashion become such as strong influence on people's lives.
I Initiate with positive development the many people are dress today are influenced by global fashion trends, A good example that people can work in professional work such as like HR, Principal, Engineer they has a different dree style strong influence on people's live some organization HR's can communicate with other country HR's while communicate people wear a strong influence by global fashion trends then it be come strong influence on people's live.
I Terminate with negative development many people are dress today are influenced by global fashion trends, A good example with people has Unnecessary to wear fashion trends dress, to wear fashion dressing style it has a certain time to wear it but some people can wear daily life fashion dress to wear it fashion dress such as conditions like hang out with friends cafe's are any malls like Lakeshore, fashion able malls people wants to wear it.
In Conclusion many aspects of way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends people are able to do work on software domain mainly that people can wear global fashion trends to interact communicate forgien clients about project development Moreover how project was going communicate for new ideas to rise the company, In from my perspective good way people can wear global fashion trends while hanging out with friends are company colie now the dressing style modify to global fashion some people to wear to go other countries like America, Germany, Europe.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the influence of global fashion and providing arguments for both positive and negative developments. However, the development of these ideas is significantly hampered by unclear expression and a lack of logical depth. For instance, the attempt to explain how fashion influences professional life is fragmented and difficult to follow. The position is stated but not consistently supported with coherent reasoning. The ideas are present but remain under-developed, often relying on repetitive phrasing rather than substantive analysis. To improve, you should focus on clearly articulating one main idea per paragraph and supporting it with a logical explanation rather than a list of examples.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often inaccurate, such as starting paragraphs with 'I Initiate with' and 'I Terminate with', which is not appropriate for academic writing. The progression of ideas is difficult to follow because the sentences lack logical links. Referencing is often unclear, making it hard to determine the relationship between the global fashion trends mentioned and the specific examples provided. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in contrast') and ensure that each sentence flows naturally from the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which restricts the ability to convey complex ideas. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'professional work such as like HR, Principal, Engineer' and 'forgien clients'. The student relies on basic vocabulary and struggles to use more sophisticated terms accurately. Many phrases are awkward or grammatically incorrect, which occasionally impedes the reader's understanding. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your vocabulary to include more precise terms related to the topic of fashion and social influence, and focus on using these words in their correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the global fashion become'), sentence fragments, and incorrect word order. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the simple sentences used often contain errors that affect clarity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary commas and missing full stops. These frequent errors make the text difficult to read and understand. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and verb tense consistency.
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