Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The methods of dressing have been affected by global fashion trends. This is happening due to social media and TV shows. Whereas, it has a positive impact on people's lives by having awareness, adaptations, and self-esteem.
Firstly, in this modern era, social media has a major part in everyday life where influencers present themselves as modern and innovative ones in fashion. Most youngster finds it amusing to try new dressing styles as other nationalists have an influence on them. Meanwhile, many people watch TV shows and read magazines where special segments are designed for fashion and dressing, and it made them to follow new ways of getting ready sepcially in events despite having cultral attires. For instance, many southasian has followed the routine of formal clothing from English people after watching shows and movies.
Secondly, it is fundmentally a positive mindset for a person if it is needed to go to a new place, where the new dressing sense must be adapted in order to fit into their society. In addition, if you look similiar to them, you will have a strong emotional bond that will impact your future strength of friendship internationally. Moreover, it provides a strong sense of self confidence for many people to fullfill their perosnal desires as many people only try new thing if they usually liked it. For example, mostly girls follows new trends as a act of freedom and self protection after influenced positively by other women around the globe.
In conclusion, it is obvious that social media has great imapct on people's decision on trying something new but it also useful to have their self-esteem on front line. It would give them a new energy to spark and get involved with every person around the world.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the influence of global fashion and the evaluation of this trend. The position is clear, arguing that global fashion is a positive development. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention social media and TV as drivers, the explanation of how these influence lives is a bit superficial. The examples provided, such as South Asians adopting formal clothing, are relevant but could be expanded to better illustrate the 'how' and 'why'. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is fully explored with more depth and specific reasoning rather than relying on general statements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Firstly', 'Meanwhile', and 'In addition', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical or forced, such as the use of 'Whereas' at the start of the third sentence, which does not function correctly as a connector here. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the link between 'fitting into a society' and 'future strength of friendship' is somewhat tenuous. Improving the flow between sentences would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to express your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'innovative', 'cultral attires', and 'self-esteem'. However, there are several spelling errors, such as 'youngster' (should be 'youngsters'), 'sepcially', 'fundmentally', 'similiar', 'perosnal', and 'imapct'. These errors are frequent enough to be noticeable. To improve, focus on using a wider range of precise vocabulary and ensure careful proofreading to eliminate basic spelling mistakes. Using more sophisticated collocations would also help elevate your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow, such as 'Most youngster finds it amusing' (subject-verb agreement) and 'many southasian has followed' (pluralization). There are also issues with article usage and prepositional phrases. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they occur frequently enough to limit the score. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent pluralization, and try to incorporate more varied complex structures with greater accuracy.
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