Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the modern world , fashion become trend to inhance the pesonality for every individual . many ways individual change dressing sence and influenced people globaly .i has both positive or negative development for which vindication would be elaborated in the upcoming paragraphs .

To commence with , there are several positive effects are associated with it , the first and fore most point is , trend . to explain with , firstly , famous on internet or social media . most of the online platforms are become sell differents type of trendy cloths in easy way to sell to individuals . Moreover , celebraties and international celebrates influence the brand of cloths and promote .fore example , most famous actor ranvir kapoor wear fashionable cloth and then become trendy amoung people . therefore , most of the famous brands like H&M ,ZARA , ADIDASS this brands sell cloths in afforadable price .

Moving further , there are some negative effects are associated with it , the most prominent point is , costly . it become very costly so not every common people cant afford it . In addition , most of youngster are influnced by other and force their parents to buy it . therefore , it become loss of culture because every one wear fashionablr cloth to become nice or for name and fame so they wear western cloth and treditional cloths are dissappear .

In conclusion , after taking all the aspects in my consendration , I would loke to empahazise that , it has both positive or negative effect like influence people to buy expansive cloth, and disappear culture .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for the influence of fashion and discussing both positive and negative aspects. However, the development of ideas is limited. The explanation of why fashion has become influential is somewhat superficial, focusing primarily on social media and celebrities without deeper analysis. The discussion of positive and negative effects is also brief and lacks depth, relying on simple examples like 'Ranvir Kapoor' or 'loss of culture'. To improve, you should aim to expand your arguments with more detailed reasoning and clearer examples that directly support your points, ensuring the position remains consistent throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'To commence with' and 'Moving further' are used, but the internal flow within paragraphs is disjointed. There is a lack of logical progression between sentences, and some sentences are fragmented, making it difficult to follow the argument. Referencing is also unclear at times, such as in the phrase 'this brands sell cloths'. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which restricts the ability to convey complex ideas. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'inhance', 'pesonality', 'celebraties', 'afforadable', and 'expansive' (used instead of 'expensive'). The range of vocabulary is basic, and there is little evidence of less common lexical items or an awareness of collocation. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning the correct spelling of common words and expanding your vocabulary to include more precise terms related to the topic of fashion and social influence.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The grammatical range is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with frequent errors. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement ('fashion become trend', 'most of the online platforms are become sell'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are grammatically incomplete or incorrectly punctuated, which occasionally impedes the reader's understanding. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring subjects and verbs agree, and practicing the correct use of tenses. Reducing the frequency of these basic errors is essential for achieving a higher score.

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