Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
It is often that most people dresses are influenced by international fashion trends. In my opinion, this is a negative development because this reduces thinking capability and this lead to loss of traditions or culture.
On the one hand, the primary reason why I think it is a negative development is that global fashion become a strong influence on people's lives which lead to reduce the thinking capability of a person. This means, some people have a good fashion sense but they are so much influenced by fashion trends that they don't think about whether this will look good or not. Moreover, those who have the knowledge about any kind of fashion they can utlise that in their life but mostly are depended on technology for searching about trends. For instance, a person knows about fashion designing and designs a good dresses but that also rely on websites to look for trends and made clothes exactly same. As a result, their thinking capability will reduce .
On the other hand, another compelling reason is that by influencing international styles there is a risk of loss of tradition. To elaborate this, every country every religion has their own traditions or culture and country is recognized by their traditions. If public will follow international trends then culture will be dissappared as people will follow international trends. Additionally, time will come when the citizens of the country also do not recognize their own culture. For example, in today era many high level class are following global fashion and many of them don't even know about their own cultural fashions. As a result, traditions and culutre can be loss.
In conclusion, I think it is a negative development because this will impact on human's thinking capability and also there is a risk of loss of culture.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for the influence of global fashion and expressing a clear negative stance. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive. For instance, the argument regarding 'thinking capability' is stated multiple times without significant expansion or deeper analysis. The examples provided, such as the mention of fashion designers relying on websites, are relevant but lack sufficient detail to fully support the claims. To reach a higher band, you should aim to provide more nuanced explanations and ensure that each paragraph introduces a distinct, well-supported point rather than restating the same concept.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion' are used to guide the reader. However, the progression of ideas within paragraphs is sometimes mechanical, and the use of referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'this lead to loss of traditions or culture'. While the overall structure is coherent, the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their intended antecedents.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, allowing the message to be conveyed clearly. However, there is a lack of range and precision. You rely on basic terms like 'good', 'bad', and 'things', and there are several spelling errors, such as 'utlise', 'dissappared', and 'culutre'. To improve, you should incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to fashion, globalization, and cultural identity. Additionally, focus on using collocations more accurately to enhance the sophistication of your writing, as some word choices, such as 'high level class', are not standard English expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the accuracy of the text. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'most people dresses are influenced', 'global fashion become'), article usage, and tense consistency. For example, 'many of them don't even know about their own cultural fashions' is grammatically awkward. To achieve a higher score, you need to demonstrate better control over complex structures and reduce the frequency of basic grammatical slips, ensuring that your sentences are consistently error-free.
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