Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Styling like a business tycon is a new trend in the fashion industry and people in india are following the global trends when it comes to styling.
Global fashion has become strongly influencial on people's lives as they believe in the power and confidence they achieve from dressing in differnt style. This essay will dicuss both the adantages and disadvantages of this trend.
To begin with, styling industry has evolved so much since when it attains the attentions of the normal public. They have start experimenting with the normal clothes and styled them according to the normal public views and comfort on dressing. DUe to this many customers are attacted to the the idealogy of styling their basic outfits and making them look trendy and cool. For example, basic shirt worn in the office are quite uncomfortable and wearing them for long durations create a sence of dicomfort, to resolve this issue fashion industry has put up with newly customized shirt tops that has been effective in reaching the public eyes. They have recreated the new look without distortion of the the dress code which has more comfort.
One of the major disadvantages of these scaling fashion industry would be they are charging more profits per item sold in order to provide comfort. Some cloths are exceptionally expensive just because of the branding they are sold at. The making cost remains the same as compared to a normal shirt, charging extra just for the designing and layout change is not a viable solution.
In conclusion, the global industry certainly had great impact because of the success achieved by the people but we should certainly not forget the simplicity of the clothes and should be least minimilistic as we can. It will also decrease the import which certinlly affect the GDP positively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The essay addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing the influence of global fashion and providing a perspective on whether it is positive or negative. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you mention the 'power and confidence' gained from styling, the explanation of why global fashion has become so influential is limited. The discussion on advantages and disadvantages is present, but the arguments—such as the comfort of customized shirts or the high cost of branding—are not fully explored or supported with strong, logical reasoning. To improve, ensure that each point is expanded with clear, illustrative examples that directly relate to the global nature of the trend.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or repetitive. For instance, the transition 'To begin with' is used, but the internal flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed, such as in the second paragraph where the connection between 'normal public views' and 'customized shirt tops' is abrupt. Additionally, some referencing is unclear, and the logical progression of ideas within paragraphs could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one will enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several instances of imprecise word choice and spelling errors that detract from the quality of the writing. Examples include 'tycon' (tycoon), 'influencial' (influential), 'dicuss' (discuss), 'attacted' (attracted), and 'minimilistic' (minimalistic). While you attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'fashion industry' and 'branding', the range is somewhat limited. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise terminology and ensure that spelling is accurate, as frequent errors can impede the reader's understanding of your arguments.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('industry has evolved... when it attains', 'shirt tops that has been'), incorrect article usage ('the the idealogy'), and awkward phrasing ('should be least minimilistic as we can'). These errors are noticeable and occur frequently, although they do not completely prevent the reader from understanding your meaning. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy, particularly with verb tenses and pluralization, and try to incorporate more varied, error-free complex sentences.
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