Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Driven by celebrity culture and mass production, more people are choosing to follow global trend in terms of the way they dress. I firmly believe that this is a negative trend because it leads to cultural homogenization and poor financial decisions.
Driven by celebrity culture and mass production, more people are choosing to follow global trend in terms of the way they dress. I firmly believe that this is a negative trend because it leads to cultural homogenization and poor financial decisions.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under-length, containing only 82 words against the 250-word requirement. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While you have identified a clear position and provided two reasons (cultural homogenization and financial decisions), these ideas are not developed or supported with examples or explanations. To reach a higher band, you must expand each point into a full paragraph, providing specific examples and logical reasoning to support your claims. The current response functions more like an introduction than a complete essay.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text is too brief to demonstrate a range of cohesive devices or effective paragraphing. The repetition of the entire introductory paragraph suggests a lack of planning or a technical error. While the sentences present are logically connected, the overall structure is insufficient to demonstrate the ability to organize ideas into a coherent essay. To improve, you need to structure your response with a clear introduction, body paragraphs with topic sentences, and a conclusion, using linking words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in contrast' to connect your ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is accurate and appropriate for the topic, such as 'celebrity culture', 'mass production', and 'cultural homogenization'. However, the range is very limited due to the brevity of the response. The repetition of the entire text prevents a demonstration of a wider lexical range. To improve, you should aim to use a broader variety of topic-specific vocabulary and synonyms to avoid repetition and demonstrate a more sophisticated command of the language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The grammar in the sentences provided is accurate, and you have used a complex structure ('Driven by...'). However, the range of structures is limited by the short length of the response. There are no significant grammatical errors in the text provided, but the limited output makes it impossible to assess your ability to use a wide range of complex structures consistently. To achieve a higher score, you must write a full-length essay that demonstrates a variety of sentence types, including both simple and complex forms.
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