Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In recent years, It is widely believed that this trend become increasingly common and share in modern world. while it is true that this trends has a strong influence on people lives. Different type of digital marketing strategies are the effective reason behind this. In my personal opinion, this is positive development. people have more choices to choose and cultural expansion took a rapid growth in all over the world with this trends.
To begin with the reason, technology plays a key role in the rapid growth global fashion. People uses modern tools and strategies for the awarness of their fashionable items. through which their items are shared and expanded all around the world just in a few seconds. For instance, organization uses social media platforms such as Facebook, Instagram and many more, which make them sharable in every part of the world. Morever, International brands tries to expand their brand in developed countries, which targets people of high income. For example, Most people uses a global brand shoes like Adidas and sketchers. which lead to a strong influence on people of different region.
In my opinion this is positive development, the famous shopping brands in all over the world will try to come and spend more and more in our country, where more people will try to use and invest in such type of brands for shopping. For example, instead of local shoes people will try to busy shoes from a famous brand such as Adidas and Sketcher. which will lead to growth in economy of our country.
In conclusion, Global fashion has influenced the life people in all over the world. In my perspective it has many advantages to people and government.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying digital marketing as a key influence and arguing that the trend is positive. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you mention economic growth, the link between global fashion and cultural expansion is not fully explored or supported with deep analysis. The position is clear, but the arguments lack the depth required for a higher band. To improve, ensure that each body paragraph provides a more detailed explanation of the 'why' and 'how' behind your claims, rather than relying on brief examples.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'To begin with', 'For instance', and 'In conclusion'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate, such as starting a sentence with 'which' or 'Morever' (a spelling error). Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the transition between sentences could be smoother. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each sentence flows naturally from the previous one without relying on repetitive structures.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the range and precision expected at higher levels. You rely on basic terms like 'good' or 'famous' and repeat words like 'influence' and 'brands'. There are also some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'busy shoes' instead of 'buy shoes' and 'awarness of their fashionable items'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to globalization, consumerism, and economic impact, and pay closer attention to word forms and correct collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You frequently make errors with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'this trends has', 'People uses') and article usage. Punctuation is also problematic, with several sentence fragments starting with 'which' or 'For example'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensure that every sentence contains a clear subject and a main verb, avoiding fragments.
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