Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Celebrities are incresingly becoming role model for the youth as there images and lifestyle are shown across the internet also in moives and on other social platform. Nowdays, people dress are influenced from global fashion trends. I shed some light on statement and find it is a negative develpment .Which vindication would be elobrated in upcoming paragraph.

To start with, there are many reason associated with it, the first and for most point is influenced.To explain this, in todays people are influenced for other such as from celebrities. They forgot how the real life is they only follow there role modal and want to become like them they always want to recreate there look there style aslo there diaglouges .Which did not make them less creative but also a copy-cat .Moreover , the next point is money waste.To justify it, when the youth is follow trend the also recreate them which lead to a money waste because they copy there clothes style and other.

Furthermore, the another point is culture. To elobrate it, people are forgot our culture due to new trends such as they change the way of clothing and eating .They

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address both parts of the prompt regarding why global fashion influences lives and whether this is positive or negative. However, the candidate's argument is severely underdeveloped and incomplete. Furthermore, the response is cut off mid-sentence at 193 words, failing the 250-word minimum length requirement significantly. While a position is stated (negative development), the ideas are not adequately supported or extended due to the abrupt ending and limited content. Based on these limitations, the response falls into the lower bands for Task Achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The text attempts a logical structure with introductory and body paragraph markers such as "To start with" and "Furthermore". However, the paragraphing breaks down as the essay cuts off prematurely, and cohesion is frequently faulty or mechanical (e.g., "Which vindication would be elobrated in upcoming paragraph"). Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall organization lacks smooth progression and clear cohesive flow between sentences.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent word-choice and spelling errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples include "incresingly", "moives", "platform", "Nowdays", "diaglouges", and "elobrated". While there are basic attempts at topic-related vocabulary like "global fashion trends" and "role model", the range is limited, and spelling errors are numerous and distracting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures are consistently faulty, such as in "Celebrities are incresingly becoming role model for the youth as there images and lifestyle are shown across the internet also in moives..." Punctuation and subject-verb agreement errors are frequent throughout the text, including incorrect pronoun usage (e.g., "there" instead of "their"), which causes considerable difficulty for the reader.

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