Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this fastly developing and changing world. People are not only infuenced by global fashion trends but these world wide trends also have significant affected their lifes. According to my perspective this devepolment is some how negative.

In past, fashion was just limited to particular society or culture becuase during that time world was not like a global village as today. In present time indiviuals have different platforms from where they can stay connected to whole world. For example, various means of communicaton. Mostly learned about international fashion trends through infuencers active on Instagram, facebook,youtube and other sources.

Futhermore it has been strongly influencing in many way. Most common is crosscultural fashion shows were organised recently in many wel known nations like America which has a considerable impact on whole world. As people usually follows fashion of famous hollywood celebrities so people are now moving forward and incorporating modern fashion in thier lives. For example, if I would about my own country. Now there is a drametic change indiviuals are more focused towards western fashion which some times casue problems for females as if they wear short dresses thier parents and society have objections on them because it is considered as unethical act. People in our culture widely believe that female should wear full attire according to their culture and values so it can have detrimental affects on community as a whole and indiviuals if there is no proper awareness about modern changing trends.

In conclusion, It has negative effects becuse of lack of education about global trend. Furthermore, it is culturaly unacceptable and against the values of some nations. Government should foster awareness among people on how to cope with changing world trends.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: how global fashion influences lives and whether this is a positive or negative development. The writer takes a clear position that the development is negative, focusing on cultural clash and lack of education. However, the ideas are somewhat under-developed and lack the depth expected for higher bands. For instance, the explanation of cross-cultural fashion shows and the example regarding family objections are somewhat repetitive and over-generalized. The response touches upon relevant concepts such as social media influence and traditional values, but the reasoning remains basic. This aligns well with the Band 6 descriptor, where all parts of the task are addressed, but some ideas are insufficiently extended.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay displays a logical overall arrangement with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is attempted, though the division of ideas could be improved, as the second body paragraph contains multiple shifts in focus without sufficient breathing room. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'For example', 'Futhermore', and 'In conclusion', but some are mechanical or misused (e.g., starting a sentence with 'Futhermore it has been...'). Referencing is occasionally unclear, as seen in the sentence 'if I would about my own country', which disrupts the natural flow of progression. This performance corresponds to Band 5.5 or a solid Band 6.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with attempts to use less common words such as 'infuenced', 'detrimental affects', and 'incorporating'. However, there are frequent spelling errors ('fastly', 'infuenced', 'world wide', 'lifes', 'devepolment', 'some how', 'becuase', 'indiviuals', 'communicaton', 'Futhermore', 'were', 'wel known', 'follows', 'thier', 'drametic', 'casue', 'culturaly'), which detract from the quality. Word choice and collocations are occasionally awkward, such as 'drametic change indiviuals are more focused towards western fashion'. Because the vocabulary errors are noticeable and stem from basic spelling issues rather than just sophisticated lexical slips, the response fits the Band 5 descriptor.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as conditional clauses ('if they wear short dresses thier parents and society have objections'). However, there are frequent grammatical errors and punctuation issues, including sentence fragments ('In this fastly developing and changing world.'), comma splices, and subject-verb agreement errors ('female should wear full attire'). Punctuation is often neglected, and missing words impair readability in places (e.g., 'if I would about my own country'). Because errors are frequent and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, the grammar performance is characteristic of Band 5.

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