Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
yet people are wearing dress today are influenced by the global fashion trends, i go with positive asscept, because the people can enhance that interest to wear global fashion dresses when then went for trips.
Some people are modify their dressing style they are strong influence on people live, some people are went some famous places to travel with friends or family, still they want to wear global fashion dresses because they enhance our country with various dressing styles Nevertheless people want to go some other country but the culture was different, For instance most of the students are now higher studies to went various coutries like UK, US USA, their the culture and dressing style was different then so the people are going trend with global fashion
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by stating an opinion on global fashion and its positive nature, mentioning international travel and studying abroad. However, the response falls severely short of the minimum word count requirement, containing only 128 words instead of the required 250 words. Because of this major task constraint failure, the ideas remain heavily under-developed and incomplete, leaving several parts of the prompt superficially treated. The position is stated, but there is insufficient space and elaboration to fully support it with relevant examples. Consequently, this performance aligns closely with Band 4 descriptors for Task Achievement due to the minimal and truncated development of the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks clear logical organisation and adequate paragraphing. The text is structured into a brief introduction and a single run-on second paragraph that attempts to cram multiple ideas together. Cohesive devices are misused or absent, making the flow disjointed and difficult to follow. For example, phrases such as 'Nevertheless people want to go some other country' are used incorrectly to transition between ideas. Referencing is also weak, as pronouns and conjunctions do not clearly link clauses or sentences. This results in a lack of overall progression, placing the response at Band 4 for coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent word choice and collocation errors that severely impede communication. Examples include 'asscept' instead of 'aspect', 'enhance that interest' rather than 'pursue that interest', and 'people are modify their dressing style'. The student attempts to use some topic-related vocabulary like 'global fashion trends' and 'culture', but the limited range and high frequency of errors cause significant strain for the reader. This corresponds to a Band 4 level for Lexical Resource.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of poorly constructed, overly complex or run-on sentences that break down structurally. There are persistent, major errors in basic grammar, tense usage, and sentence boundaries throughout the text, such as 'when then went for trips' and 'students are now higher studies to went various coutries'. Very few error-free sentences exist, and the frequency of grammatical errors frequently distorts the intended meaning. This level of control fits the Band 4 descriptors for Grammatical Range and Accuracy.
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