Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Dressing play an improtant rules in personality of a human and it also keep the good impact on brain because if you dress well you focus on your work well it also nessary to update your dressing according to trend other wise you may feel different from other people that srounding by you and you feel low confident then other and with passage of time trend change day by day fashion industry become bigger now the days the influencer who have social media life have their personal designer who style their dresses on different events and peolpe who like their favorite influencer and inspire their and follow them in dressing the positive impact is that they dress well and good feel and it make them happy and negative impact the peolpe who not afford this life they become depressed and not feel cofident and able to look back life of their infulencer their off camera life they just look which on social media to make this life like influencer they include crime to achieve the goals and if it happen become in every area of a country it will a huge impact on development of a nation.

The concusion is that you must be updated to know the fashion trend globally

but the not at crazy level that take you out of mind.

i saw many people who destory their life just want to follow to fashion trend every life of aspect of according to trend and they spend all the money which they can spend their simple life easily but for trend for just saticifaction of mind that they living the life according global fashion

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing why global fashion has become influential and whether this is a positive or negative development. The writer attempts to explore several ideas, such as social media influencers, psychological impacts like confidence, and societal consequences including financial strain and crime. However, the development of these ideas is hindered by severe issues with clarity and structure. The arguments are presented in a very generalized, disjointed manner, and the transition between positive and negative aspects lacks clear distinction. While the writer attempts to present a position, the lack of coherent support and under-development of arguments pull the task response down. Concepts such as crime resulting from inability to afford trendy clothes are asserted without logical elaboration, resulting in a score that reflects limited development.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

Coherence and cohesion are severely compromised in this essay. The text is written largely as a continuous, massive run-on sentence in the first paragraph, featuring multiple clauses joined clumsily by conjunctions like 'and' without proper punctuation or full stops. The paragraphing is problematic; the second paragraph starts abruptly with 'The concusion is that...', but is then followed by a third block of text that acts more like a continuation of the body rather than a conclusion. Logical organization and progression are missing, and cohesive devices are either absent or inappropriately used. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it very difficult for the reader to follow the flow of arguments from one point to the next, placing it firmly in the lower band range.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The lexical resource is limited and basic. The student uses very simple vocabulary repeatedly, such as 'good', 'trend', 'fashion', 'life', and 'people'. There are frequent word choice and collocation errors, for instance, writing 'Dressing play an improtant rules' instead of playing an important role, and 'keep the good impact on brain'. Spelling errors are scattered throughout the text, including 'important', 'nessary', 'other wise', 'srounding', 'infulencer', 'saticifaction', and 'destory'. Although the writer attempts some less common vocabulary items like 'influencer', 'development', and 'confidence', the high frequency of basic errors and inaccurate word formations restricts the score to this level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the submission. The first paragraph is essentially a single, unbroken run-on sentence spanning nearly two hundred words, completely lacking necessary terminal punctuation and proper clause separation. There is a near-total absence of accurate complex sentence structures; instead, clauses are strung together with coordinating conjunctions. Numerous basic grammatical errors are present, including subject-verb agreement issues ('Dressing play', 'trend change'), missing auxiliary verbs ('peolpe who not afford'), incorrect tense usage, and pervasive punctuation failures. These frequent errors severely impede communication and disrupt the reading process, warranting a low band score.

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