Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the genration of modelization evey person are diferent from others but some of how they are influenced and follwed the global fashion trends.

Overoll, global fashoin become the trend in many countries the peoples followed the by influenced from social media platforms such that instagram and facebook.

Many masses are connected through form these platforms and think differently of their dresing styles, hairs and many living things in some way these changes are positive because the peoples start and feels respect for the every culture and civilization so that it starts feeling the equlity for every kind of skin toned people, Hairs and etc.

Futhermore, In the starting curly haired human being are shamed herself and feels low confidance to walk in the public and they always thinks to straighten there hairs In additions these type of thing feels every person who is diffrent from other persons those whoes are in high quantity but know social media platsform are made every fashion , every type of hair become a fashoin and trend. It creates more confidance in the every person whoes ones suffers from the these types of insecurities

In the some way it create negtive impact becuse every person wants the lasted fashion also they want to do everything to adopt a new fashioned some people do it in the wrong ways to fulfil their desire.

Conclusion the global fashiones are create good impact as well as negtive impact it totally depend upon the person that how they can deal with it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to address both parts of the prompt regarding why global fashion has become influential and whether it is a positive or negative development. The position is discernible, noting both benefits such as increased cultural respect and confidence, as well as drawbacks like consumerism. However, the ideas are underdeveloped and the expression is often confusing, making it difficult to fully grasp the arguments. For instance, the transition into positive aspects mentions how 'peoples start and feels respect for the every culture', which lacks depth and specific examples. The conclusion succinctly acknowledges both sides but remains very basic. Consequently, the response aligns best with a Band 4.5 or 5.0 descriptor profile, as the task is addressed only partially with limited idea expansion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is divided into paragraphs, including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a brief conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by severe structural and grammatical issues. Cohesive devices are either misused or absent, resulting in a disjointed reading experience. For example, transitional phrases like 'Futhermore, In the starting' and 'In additions' are poorly integrated and punctuation fails to guide the reader effectively. Paragraphing is attempted, but individual paragraphs lack internal cohesion and clear topic sentences, jumping abruptly between ideas such as curly hair insecurities and negative consumer impacts. This organisation reflects Band 4 characteristics, where information and ideas are not arranged in a sufficiently coherent manner.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The student demonstrates a very basic and limited vocabulary range, frequently relying on repetitive words such as 'fashion', 'people', and 'confidance'. There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, including 'genration' instead of generation, 'modelization', 'fashoin', 'equlity', and 'negtive'. Less common lexical items are attempted but generally fail due to inaccurate collocation and form, such as 'high quantity' instead of the majority. These persistent errors and limited flexibility severely strain the reader and restrict the lexical score to a Band 4.0 level, as the vocabulary is basic and repetitive.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. The text contains a high density of basic and complex sentence errors that frequently impede communication. Examples include subject-verb agreement errors like 'every person are', tense inconsistencies such as 'global fashoin become the trend', and flawed sentence structures like 'In the starting curly haired human being are shamed herself'. Punctuation is largely neglected, and complex sentence structures are consistently faulty. The range of structures is very limited, with basic errors recurring in almost every sentence. This places the performance firmly at Band 4.0, where errors are frequent and often distort meaning.

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