Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

With moderzisation the ways in adoptation of dressing by people is changed specially by young agers. This is because of the trends that are becoming famous globally regarding to fashion.This essay will discuss the reasons behind this perspective and will decribe that the negative effects are more depite of benefits.

The of all the main reason for following such trend is the excess use of internet and television. The famous celebrities wear several types of clothes of different brands, provoking their billions of followers to copy them. Advertisment has increased due to social platforms like instagram, youtube, tiktok, facebook as well as many more. These applications are now in frequently use, making yougsters obsessed with these clothing.The second important reasons is the availabilty of these types of dresses at several websites, allowing the purchasers to get these on less rate. Due to cheap in cost and easy accessiblity these trends are getting in.

The negative affect is that people forget their traditional dressing and it is a drwaback foe the development of the culture.Shalwar kameez is the national dress of Pakistan but now a large number of population wants to wear jeans, pants, coats, jackets, shirts and T-shirts which is very disappointing. People are getting away from the customs of the countries just because of just following that fashion.

Although, there are several advantages too. Adopting fashions like this enables individuals to get connect with world and they can gain confidence by outting these types of modern clothing items. They can get jobs in garment industries which will be the source of income.

In conclution, it is clear that the main reasons for this aspect is social media, excess fan following of celebrities and easy availabilty of clothes at low costs. Despite of some benefits it has more negarive affects because people are just taking their culture for granted.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing why global fashion has become influential and arguing that it is a negative development. The position is clear throughout the essay. The ideas are relevant, noting the role of social media, celebrity endorsement, and cheap online accessibility. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For example, the negative impacts are illustrated briefly using the national dress of Pakistan, but the arguments could be extended further with deeper explanation. Despite the under-development of certain points, all prompt questions are answered, and a clear stance is maintained. This aligns well with the Band 6 descriptors where all parts are addressed and relevant ideas are presented, though some lack full extension.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is divided into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs for reasons and impacts, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently hindered by awkward referencing, punctuation issues, and mechanical cohesive devices. For instance, transitional phrases like 'The of all the main reason' and 'In conclution' contain significant errors. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion feels disjointed in places, such as in the abrupt transition between discussing advantages and concluding. Pronoun referencing is occasionally unclear. These features reflect the Band 5 to Band 6 transition; while there is an overall structure and some organisation, the use of cohesive devices is flawed and mechanical, making Band 5.5 the most appropriate score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student attempts a range of vocabulary relevant to the topic, including terms like 'modernisation', 'celebrities', 'followers', and 'garment industries'. However, there are numerous word choice, collocation, and spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'moderzisation', 'adoptation', 'young agers', 'Advertisment', 'frequently use', 'on less rate', 'cheap in cost', 'accessiblity', 'drwaback', 'outting', and 'negarive affects'. These errors occasionally cause strain for the reader, although communication remains generally clear. The vocabulary is adequate for the task, but the high frequency of lexical slips prevents the score from reaching a Band 6.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as using 'Although, there are several advantages too' and participial clauses like 'allowing the purchasers to get these on less rate'. However, grammatical accuracy is weak. There are frequent errors in prepositions ('depite of', 'at several websites'), articles ('The of all', 'a large number of population'), verb forms ('is changed', 'are getting in'), and sentence fragments ('Due to cheap in cost and easy accessiblity these trends are getting in'). These errors are frequent and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. The control of grammar aligns most closely with Band 5, where attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty.

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