Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The way people dree in these days are most likely influenced by global trends of clothing. When people see someone wearing good clothes they also wants to wear those kind of clothes making it a global trend which is follled by others also. The global fashion has a strong influence on people's lives for the reason that people are wanted to look as attractive as others in there life. Some people argue that this is a positive development but others think it as negative but we will consider both to draw a conclusion for our personal opinion.

Clothing has a great impact on a person's daily life wheter he is a student, jobholder or businessman. Everyone wants to wear clothes which are trending globally as everyone is wearing those and looks more appealing in those. This would make them more confident in their field.

There is a debate about these global fashion trends wherther this is a positive or negative development. Those who are againt it argue that people spend a lot of their money to have new clothes of every trend. If anyone have good formal clothes, he don't have to buy new for the sole pipose of following others in fashion. On the other hand those in favor argue that keeping ourselevs updated in fashion make us more confident in daily life as clothes have greater impact on a person's persolity and these gives much more confidence. This also helps in growing economy.

Overall the global fashion trends have great impact on person's lives and in my opinion it is a positive impact on person's life as I see it have much more benefits to follow global trends by boosting their personality.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing why global fashion has become a strong influence and giving an opinion on whether this is a positive or negative development. The writer states a clear position in the introduction and conclusion, supporting it with reasons related to confidence, attractiveness, and economic growth. However, the ideas are somewhat repetitive and lack deeper elaboration. For instance, the argument regarding boosting confidence is repeated across multiple paragraphs without introducing new dimensions or specific examples. Furthermore, the reasoning sometimes feels circular, stating that people follow trends simply because others are wearing them. While the task is adequately addressed, the overall development of ideas corresponds to a Band 6 level due to this under-development and lack of specific real-world examples.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into four paragraphs, showing a basic structural layout with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, logical progression is hindered by repetitive phrasing and some awkward transitions. For example, the phrase 'we will consider both to draw a conclusion for our personal opinion' is somewhat formulaic and awkwardly integrated. Cohesive devices are used, but they are sometimes mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'wheter' and 'againt'. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, particularly with pronouns like 'these gives much more confidence', where the antecedent is ambiguous. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal flow of ideas within paragraphs lacks seamless connection. These features place the response firmly in the Band 5.0 to 5.5 range, leaning towards a Band 5.0 due to the mechanical nature of the cohesion and faulty referencing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the student to communicate basic ideas about clothing and fashion trends. However, there is a limited range of vocabulary, and many words are repeated frequently, such as 'clothes', 'fashion', 'trend', and 'confident'. There are also noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'dree' instead of 'dress', 'jobholder', 'sole pipose' (purpose), and 'persolity' (personality). Attempts to use less common vocabulary are constrained by spelling and morphological inaccuracies. While the meaning is generally clear despite these issues, the lexical limitations and frequent spelling mistakes prevent the response from achieving a higher band. This performance reflects the descriptors for Band 5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting structures such as conditional and relative clauses. However, grammatical accuracy is weak throughout the text, with frequent errors that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The way people dree in these days are', 'If anyone have... he don't have to buy'), awkward phrasing ('people are wanted to look'), and prepositional errors ('influence on people's lives for the reason that'). Punctuation is also sparse and sometimes missing around clause boundaries, leading to run-on sentences like 'When people see someone wearing good clothes they also wants to wear those kind of clothes making it a global trend which is follled by others also.' These frequent errors across various sentence structures place the grammar score at Band 5.

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