Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
People believe that global fashion affects their syyle in dressing or even behavior, while others think that it's problem among society due to the issues that can appear out of nowhere. Nowadays, global fashion is including clothes that most often is not comfortable and usually cannot be suitable for the weather outside.
On the one hand, there are a plenty of various clothes that can easily style your outfit and perhaps highlight you with some vivid and light colors on clothes. Informal colourful clothes can make you look brighter and maybe find mates that wearing the same type of clothes. Nevertheless, high-fashioned and styled outfit giving you extra confidence. Following that, fashion isn't bad if you mastered how to style and combine comfort and fashion.
Conversely, there are plenty of issues that following wearing fashioned clothes. For instance, wearing baggy or oversized clothes can lead to problems with moving outside, especially when its it is rainy outside. Another issue is when someone is wearing clothes at winter that not making enough heat inside to be in warm. Following that, population that would prefer to wear fashioned clothes instead of warm most often getting more illness every year. People that are used to buying high-fashioned outfits always facing a problem with comfort.
This issue is really actual right now andonly and the only way to solve it just buy warm and comfortable outfits. To summarize, it's an actual issue that population facing nowadays when people prefer to wear fasioned and not warm at cold season. There are pros and cons which can be in global fashion.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing reasons for global fashion's influence and offering an opinion on whether it is positive or negative. The student explores the positive aspects, such as confidence and self-expression, and negative aspects, such as discomfort and health issues in cold weather. However, the ideas remain somewhat under-developed and lack specific real-world examples or depth. The introduction introduces a slightly confused opening thesis ('People believe that global fashion affects their syyle... while others think that it's problem among society'), which affects the clarity of the initial position, though a clearer stance emerges later. This performance aligns with Band 5.5 descriptors, as the task is addressed, but the development of ideas is limited and sometimes repetitive.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into four paragraphs, showing an attempt at a conventional essay structure with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions and repetitive phrasing, such as starting consecutive sentences with 'Following that,'. Cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or misused. For instance, the transition 'Conversely' introduces a discussion of issues, but the linkage between sentences within the body paragraphs can feel disjointed. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion needs significant strengthening to achieve a higher score. Overall, this corresponds to a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with frequent reuse of words like 'fashion', 'clothes', 'issue', and 'warm'. There are noticeable spelling and word choice errors, such as 'syyle' instead of style, 'fasioned' instead of fashionable, and awkward collocations like 'getting more illness every year'. While the student attempts some less common vocabulary items like 'high-fashioned' and 'vivid and light colors', inaccuracies in form and collocation impede natural flow. The lexical range is minimally adequate for the task, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but many of the complex forms contain grammatical errors or awkward phrasing, such as 'Nowadays, global fashion is including clothes that most often is not comfortable' and 'especially when its it is rainy outside.' There are frequent errors in verb tense consistency, preposition use, and subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'population that would prefer... getting more illness'). These errors can cause some difficulty for the reader, though the meaning is usually still discernible. This level of grammatical control is characteristic of Band 5.0.
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