Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Global fashion trends are postive sign, due to following reasons:
Attract the customers in business organization.
Due to hansome personality and fashion trends attract the customers at work place.
Global fashion increase sale in business.
Due to global fashion in products of the company, the sale of company will be increased and revune increase more.
Trust and confidence in staff of organization.
Due to fashion trends and well-dress of staff, it increase trust and confidence level of the employees.
To win trust of customers:
Due to well-dress customers will trust in company and ready to invest in company and never loose the company trust.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response only minimally addresses the prompt, failing to fully explore how global fashion has become influential or clearly establishing whether this is a positive or negative development, aside from an opening statement that global fashion trends are a 'postive sign'. Furthermore, the response is severely under-length, containing only 104 words against the 250-word minimum requirement. The ideas are presented in disconnected bullet-like fragments rather than fully developed paragraphs with supporting arguments or relevant examples. Because the task is only partially attempted and severely deficient in length, it falls into the lower band range.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text lacks proper paragraphing and a clear logical structure. Instead of cohesive sentences and paragraphs, the student uses repetitive headings and fragmented points, such as 'Attract the customers in business organization' and 'To win trust of customers'. Transitional devices and logical connectors are almost entirely missing, meaning that information and ideas are not arranged coherently. The referencing between sentences is weak, and the overall progression expected in an academic essay is absent, making it difficult for the reader to follow a cohesive line of argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The lexical resource is very basic and repetitive. The student relies heavily on simple, high-frequency words and repeats phrases like 'business organization', 'global fashion', and 'due to' excessively throughout the short text. There are also noticeable vocabulary inaccuracies and awkward word choices, such as 'hansome personality' instead of professional appearance or attire, and 'revune' (revenue). The range of vocabulary is severely limited and inadequate for an academic task, constraining the precision of expression.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of repetitive fragments and simple structures starting with 'Due to...'. There is a complete lack of complex sentence forms. Grammatical accuracy is very low, featuring persistent errors in word formation (e.g., 'postive' for positive, 'well-dress' for well-dressed) and sentence construction. Many sentences are incomplete or lack main verbs, which frequently causes difficulty for the reader and distorts the intended meaning.
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