Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
This is globalized era, due to interconnectedness in between different nations, there is a wave of western fashion trends overall. There is strong influence of global fashion trends on people's lives. According to me, this influence has both positive and negative impact on development. In the following paragraphs, both the aspects will be discussed.
To commence with, why Global fashion Become such a strong influence on people's lives. The possible reasons are social media, celebrities and influencers, global brand and online shopping. These days everyone has social media applications in their mobile phones which provide us a view, What kind of fashion is going on. For example, If A person has a favorite celebrity and that celebrity is promoting some global brands their clothing item then person will easily get influenced by that promotion and will go to try that trend. Moreover, Online shopping apps has also create a strong influence while recommending the things as per search history of user.
On the other hand, This global trend do have negative influence on people . To justify it global fashion is equal to excessive consumerism. People constantly buy new clothes to follow trends, Which leads to wastage of money. Moreover, Traditional or local clothing is becoming less popular. Additionally, people may feel pressurized to look fashionable to get adjusted in society these days. For instance, In corporate offices female do have choice to traditional uniform they don't want formal attire but to compete with colleagues to make their self more standable They do try where they can't adjust themselves.
Overall Western fashion has created a lot of positive but negative developments too. It's up to individuals how they have to follow the trends and how they have to make a proper balance in Western culture and in their own traditional culture
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the two-part prompt. The student discusses the reasons why global fashion is influential, such as social media, celebrities, and online shopping algorithms, and touches upon both positive and negative aspects, notably excessive consumerism and cultural displacement. A clear position is presented throughout the essay. However, the ideas are somewhat under-developed, relying on brief, slightly convoluted examples rather than fully extended arguments. For instance, the example regarding female corporate dress codes is confusing and difficult to follow. Consequently, the task response aligns well with Band 6.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is divided into an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, establishing a clear overall arrangement. However, logical progression is occasionally hindered by poor referencing and mechanical cohesive devices. Phrases like 'To commence with, why Global fashion Become...' function poorly as topic headers, and referencing words like 'that person' or 'this global trend' are occasionally imprecise. Paragraphing is used, but internal cohesion within the second body paragraph feels disjointed. These limitations place the response comfortably within the Band 6 descriptor range.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range for the task, attempting less common lexical items such as 'interconnectedness', 'excessive consumerism', and 'pressurized'. However, there are noticeable word choice and word formation errors throughout, such as 'make their self more standable', 'online shopping apps has also create', and 'corporate offices female do have choice'. While these vocabulary and spelling errors do not impede overall communication, they prevent the text from achieving a higher band. A score of 6.0 reflects this mix of adequate resource and frequent minor inaccuracies.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical control is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation, such as 'This is globalized era', 'apps has also create', and 'Which leads to wastage'. Capitalisation is also erratic in the middle of sentences (e.g., 'What kind of fashion is going on', 'If A person'). While communication remains generally clear, the high frequency of basic and complex structural errors keeps the score at a Band 5.0.
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