Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In this modren world not accept the local cloth. Many people thing that everyone follow the global trends. Other people thing that no one distrib that follow the trend. In this passage i try to explain this statament.
Many people aspect that people dressing is influenced by global fashion trends. Tecnology is perform major rule in fashion trends because when people see on internet is to famous that thing to perchase it.This is not positive development because it is not good that they show there wealth or their personalty. Therefore they hard work to gain their dreams. Some people dreams that they follow all new trends.
In according to me, i think that people now need to follow the trend because it waste their money or time to shop it. It try to help the poor people that have no money to purchase the food or other thing. If every follow the all trends the trends is use less. Because people whare intrest is to end. If they have not thing that they try to gain it hardwork to get this. After this thing gain this one interest is end .
For example, When Iphone company lanouch a new Moblie phone. Every one try to gain because it a new trend or people follow this trend. when it is old no one try to follow the trend.
By exprience, i think that people no need to follow the trends, if they follow the this trend it famous to much. Therefor people leave to pormote trend .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address both parts of the prompt, discussing why global fashion has become influential and offering a perspective on whether it is positive or negative. However, the ideas are severely underdeveloped, highly repetitive, and frequently unclear. Phrases like 'In this passage i try to explain this statament' and 'If every follow the all trends the trends is use less' reflect a lack of coherent argumentation. While a position is vaguely discernible against global fashion being unnecessary or wasteful, the reasoning is obscured by poor articulation and fragmented thoughts. Consequently, the response aligns closely with the Band 4 descriptors for Task Achievement, as the ideas are minimally presented and fail to provide fully supported arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organization of the text is hindered by inappropriate paragraphing and a lack of clear logical progression. The essay begins with single-sentence paragraphs and disjointed introductory remarks. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with repetitive transitions such as 'In this passage', 'Therefore', and 'For example' applied incorrectly. Reference words are frequently ambiguous, making it difficult for the reader to follow the train of thought. For instance, sentences like 'If they have not thing that they try to gain it hardwork to get this' jump erratically between concepts without logical signposts. These structural and organizational shortcomings place the response firmly at Band 4, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
Lexical resource is very basic and heavily restricted. The student relies on repetitive, elementary vocabulary such as 'people', 'trends', 'money', and 'thing'. There are also numerous severe spelling and word-formation errors throughout the text, including 'modren' instead of modern, 'thing' instead of think, 'tecnology' instead of technology, 'perchase' instead of purchase, 'personalty' instead of personality, 'whare' instead of wear, 'lanouch' instead of launch, and 'exprience' instead of experience. These errors frequently strain the reader's understanding and impede communication, which aligns the vocabulary profile with Band 4 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of flawed simple sentences and unsuccessful attempts at complex structures. There is a complete lack of control over basic verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and sentence boundaries. Examples of severe grammatical errors include 'not accept the local cloth', 'everyone follow', 'Tecnology is perform major rule', 'they show there wealth', and 'if they follow the this trend it famous to much'. Punctuation is also erratic and frequently omitted. Because errors are frequent across all sentences and frequently distort the intended meaning, the grammar warrants a Band 4 score.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.