Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
There are many concerns related to global fashion trends, which keep individuals up to date with new fashion trends. Global fashion has become a stronger influence on citizens' lives because of social media and fashion influencers. Although worldwide fashion trends influence individuals' lives by providing more knowledge, I believe it is a positive development because it keeps individuals updated with new fashion trends.
On the one hand, many aspects influence individuals' lives, such as social media, online shopping, and access to the latest brands. Social media and influencers play a pivotal role in people's lives because they act as a source of global fashion trends. Furthermore, many people follow their favorite influencers and celebrities on social media and tend to follow their fashion trends. For instance, the youngsters in Pakistan follow many international celebrities and influencers, and then they are influenced by their dressing styles and fashion sense, and online shopping makes easier to buy the latest clothes.
On the other hand, I believe following a global fashion trend is a positive development because it keeps individuals up to date with the latest trends. Another important advantage is that it helps in economic growth because when individuals follow these latest trends, they buy new clothes which helps to increase economy. Moreover, global fashion trends allow individuals to express themselves with greater choices.
In conclusion, many aspects influence people's lives including social media, influencers, and international fashion trends. I firmly believe that it is a positive development because it can increase the economy and help to keep updated with the latest fashion trends.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing how global fashion has become influential through social media and providing a clear position that it is a positive development. Ideas are extended with examples, such as mentioning youngsters in Pakistan following international celebrities. However, the reasoning in the third paragraph is somewhat repetitive, as the student mentions keeping updated with new fashion trends in both the introduction, the second body paragraph, and the conclusion. Furthermore, the economic argument is stated rather briefly without deep extension. Despite these minor limitations in full development, the main parts of the prompt are covered adequately, aligning well with the Band 6 descriptor.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different aspects of the argument. Cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion' are employed to structure the response. However, referencing and cohesion occasionally feel mechanical or repetitive, particularly with the frequent repetition of phrases like 'fashion trends' and 'individuals' lives' across consecutive sentences. There is also a slight logical overlap between the second body paragraph's focus on social media and the conclusion's summary, but overall progression remains clear enough to satisfy the Band 6 criteria.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with attempts at less common lexical items such as 'pivotal role', 'international celebrities', and 'economic growth'. However, there are notable instances of lexical repetition, particularly the overuse of the phrase 'fashion trends' throughout the text. Additionally, there are minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'online shopping makes easier to buy', where the preposition or infinitive particle is missing, and 'increase economy' instead of 'boost the economy'. The range is sufficient to convey meaning clearly, but the lack of flexibility and occasional strain place this firmly at Band 6.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some control over multi-clause structures such as 'Although worldwide fashion trends influence individuals' lives by providing more knowledge, I believe it is a positive development because...'. However, there are several grammatical errors and punctuation issues. For example, the sentence 'online shopping makes easier to buy the latest clothes' lacks an object after 'makes'. There are also minor awkward phrasings like 'help to increase economy', which misses an article. While these errors do not impede overall communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent the text from reaching a Band 7.
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