Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In recent years, fashion trends have influenced a large number of individuals despite of border brriers. Some believe that this will affect the cultural values and old traditions in the negative way, while others argue that this is a positive development for human well-being. This essay will discuss both views before explaining why I maintain that adopting global fashion trend is a positive measure.
On the one hand, modern fashions have influenced public at large positively. Now modern clothing styles and different stylish gadgets are chosen by folowing the social media trends. This indicate the whole world as a global village and allow consumers to try different culture products. Moreover by following international trends, people are persuaded to buy different products to remain up-to-date with worldwide fashion. This will boost the sales at large scales. Consequently producers will get higher monetary benefits.
Furthermore, these trends are become more strong because of advanced technology. In contemporary world, most individuals buy products by watching reels and short videos of tiktok. By this means, they become influenced of digital trends.
On the other hand, adopting global fashion has some drawbacks. Considering different cultural commodities may loss the value of particular areas custom. Elder people often struggle for the survival of their cultural values. By following such trends may gradually diminish the old fashions. For example, in Pakistan there is a cultural cloths and cap which shows that such person belongs to a sindh province, if global trends are given more importance, these cultural values may affect badly.
In conclusion, global fashion trends may affect some customs and cultural values. However, I believe that these trends play a fundamental role in making a global village and unite the human being.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: how global fashion has become influential and whether this development is positive or negative. The writer introduces a clear position in the introduction, stating that adopting global fashion trends is a positive development, and sustains this stance throughout the essay. Ideas are presented and supported, such as discussing how social media and technology like TikTok drive trends, and examining cultural preservation on the flip side. However, some arguments lack full extension and depth. For instance, the discussion on economic benefits through higher sales is somewhat brief and repetitive. Nevertheless, all requirements of the task are adequately covered, matching the Band 6 descriptor well.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a clear logical progression. Information and ideas are divided into appropriate paragraphs, starting with an introduction, moving to body paragraphs addressing the causes, the positive aspects, and the negative drawbacks, and finishing with a concise conclusion. Cohesive devices are employed to connect ideas, such as "On the one hand," "Furthermore," and "On the other hand." However, some cohesive referencing and transitions are a bit mechanical or faulty, such as "This indicate the whole world as a global village," where referencing could be smoother. Overall, paragraphing is used sufficiently, aligning closely with Band 6 standards for coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common items such as "global village," "monetary benefits," and "cultural commodities." However, there are noticeable word choice and collocation inaccuracies throughout the text, including phrases like "despite of border brriers," "folowing the social media trends," and "cultural cloths." Spelling errors also occur, such as "brriers," "folowing," and "loss" instead of "lose." While these lexical errors and limitations do not severely impede communication, they restrict the lexical score to a Band 5.5, reflecting an adequate yet error-prone vocabulary range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating relative clauses and conditional structures. However, grammatical accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in prepositions, verb forms, and articles, such as "in the negative way" instead of "in a negative way," "these trends are become more strong," "become influenced of digital trends" instead of "by," and "By following such trends may gradually diminish." Subject-verb agreement and tense consistency also need attention. These errors occur frequently and occasionally cause some difficulty for the reader, which places the grammar performance firmly at a Band 5.0.
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