Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

So many people belive our dress was the most influenced to people to all time. Nowadays, fashion was most influened to people in daily life. so people was so many influence to people. people can be leaned for fashion was mosttp all personal.I do not agree this pony of you.

Nowadays, people was influence a people to cothes. In global far to fashion in this day.most of people by influened by our film induster to msot influence a people. Now, all the celebriteys all the new and clothes for day by day. They was so many social media can use to all people like, tictok, instgram , other app. so pepple was fashion to sow and people was givn to some informaction, For example, now a days weasten culuter to take a in current day, so weastwn culther was now a on culther thay culthure was out for weast city or country.

Netherless, people was most of time our culthre side to forggert amd new westen culthure to take to all time. People was difffent side a culthure now a days so that why. on people was most of time forgeet to all side and people was duing all time pirods. For example, people for in daily life current days to uses to all time weaing to colther for out side and global people is this was to modt people this days,

In concluned, Althout poeple ws most influence in now days to westen cullture to take a way. They was people not take a our on culture so that people was not use right now, In my poiny weast culture was weaing to clother for but didi'nt forgetter in oun culture.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address both parts of the prompt regarding the influence of global fashion and whether it is a positive or negative development. However, the development of ideas is severely limited and unclear due to extreme language barriers. The writer states a position ('I do not agree this pony of you'), but the arguments regarding film industries, social media platforms like 'tictok' and 'instgram', and western culture are disjointed and difficult to follow. The ideas remain underdeveloped, and the reasoning is frequently obscured by poor expression. Consequently, the response falls short of fully answering the prompt in a coherent manner, aligning most closely with the Band 4 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organisation of the text is hindered by a lack of logical progression and poor control of cohesive devices. Although the student attempts paragraphing, the internal structure of these paragraphs is extremely disjointed. Transitional phrases and linking words are either misused or absent, resulting in a series of disconnected sentences. Referencing is frequently unclear (e.g., 'this was to modt people this days'), which creates significant confusion for the reader in tracking the development of ideas. Overall, information is not arranged coherently enough to reach a Band 5, placing the response firmly at Band 4.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and often inaccurate. Throughout the text, words are incorrectly chosen or severely misspelled, such as 'belive' for believe, 'influened' for influenced, 'pony' for point, 'celebriteys' for celebrities, 'tictok' for tiktok, and 'weasten' for western. There is no evidence of a sufficient range of vocabulary to discuss the topic effectively. The persistent spelling and word-choice errors severely strain the reader's understanding and impede communication, which aligns directly with the criteria for Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. The writer relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and almost all attempts at more complex structures result in severe errors. There are constant issues with subject-verb agreement, tense usage (such as mixing past and present inappropriately), and word order. Sentences frequently lack grammatical integrity, for example, 'so people was so many influence to people.' Errors are pervasive across nearly every sentence, distorting meaning and making the text very difficult to parse, which is characteristic of Band 4 performance.

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