Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In today's rapidly changing word, global fashion trends has become a matter of considerable debate. Variety of persons are getting influnced by different global trends and that may leave a lasting impact on individuals. Additionaly global fastion influencing them now a days. Although this development offers several positive points but the weightage of negative pointers are overtaking. I am defending the negative side of fashion trends.
Firstly, One of the main reason why most of the people following the global fashion trend is to keep them selves updated. this is because of social media as many of our private life stuff is easily accessable and poeple are blindly follwing the unnecessary fashion trends. the only positive site that is noticable is to keep individual indulge with the latest update and the feel more confient after the adaption of newley discoverd globale trends. for example, if a person flowwed the most recent globasl fashion tren he feel more confident and appreciated in his surrounding.
However, global fashion trends leave a lasting negative impact on todays life. people are following all of them so blindely beacues the influncers of such fashion trend setter are promoting it faslty with the help of social media. For i
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address both parts of the prompt regarding how global fashion influences lives and whether this is positive or negative. However, the development of ideas is severely limited due to the under-length nature of the text, as the response stops abruptly mid-sentence with only 203 words produced, falling short of the 250-word minimum. While the writer states a clear position ('I am defending the negative side'), the arguments are repetitive and lack sufficient support. Examples provided are superficial and underdeveloped. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, which aligns with the criteria for Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay attempts a traditional structure with an introduction and body paragraphs, utilising transition markers such as 'Firstly' and 'However'. However, the organisation breaks down due to the abrupt ending and poor paragraphing choices, such as overly brief, fragmented sentences. Cohesive devices are often inaccurate or mechanically applied, as seen in 'Additionally global fastion influencing them now a days.' Referencing is unclear in places, and the overall progression is hindered by repetitive phrasing and disjointed thoughts. This level of organisation and cohesion reflects Band 5.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, featuring frequent spelling and word-choice errors that occasionally strain the reader's comprehension. Examples include misspelled words like 'word' instead of 'world', 'influnced', 'Additionaly', 'fastion', 'accessable', 'follwing', 'newley discoverd', and 'globasl'. The range of vocabulary is limited, and attempts at less common words result in noticeable inaccuracies. While the topic is identifiable, the density of lexical errors places this performance firmly at Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures are frequently faulty and ungrammatical, such as 'One of the main reason why most of the people following the global fashion trend is to keep them selves updated.' There are frequent errors in verb forms, subject-verb agreement ('fashion trends has'), and punctuation. Because the essay is incomplete and ends mid-sentence, the overall grammatical control is significantly undermined, characteristic of a Band 4.0 performance.
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