Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Today, side of the approch society impressed to the latest fashion dress in all over world. Because global fashion strong impact on individuals lives. In my opinion it is negative development. In addition, people use the social media on daily bases and see the posts on instagram and followed the trend.

First and foremost, the fashion badly effect on human lives because in Islamic country are not allow to follow westren dress and wear like this but teenagers mostly influenced through actors because follow the accounts on social media.For example, in Pakistan culture trend wear the shalwar qameez but many people wear the dess jeans, shirt, skirts, teshirt, long dreeses.Furthermore, mostly parents are allowed to wearing dress like. This type of dress are negtive imapct on people lives.

On the other hand, low standard of people are not followed the trend because are not affoard the expensive dresses also social media are negative affect on citizen for see the different countries through influenced dramas, films ,vlogs. Consequently, girls wearing bold dressing and going college, universities, its awkward moreover, dressing sense are also bad. For instance, In Turkish dramas probabaly actors followed the muslim and westren culture both because Asia and Europe cnnected the boarder.Mostly womens in turkey different type of dress like skirts with short shirt and also covered the head with scarf especially girls random dressing according to occasion sometimes wear jeans with shirts also top. Every county own culture but individuals influenced globaly fashion trends.

In conclusion, global fashion trend are negative development because many people followed the latest trend and bold dressing are badly effect on people lives also spoil the culture in addition society are not followed the own culture properly adapt others countries culture and influenced cause the social media. So wearing good dress and follow the rules and regulation for our country.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: how global fashion influences lives and whether this is a positive or negative development. The writer takes a clear stance, stating throughout that it is a negative development due to cultural erosion. However, the development of ideas is limited and at times repetitive or unclear. For instance, the discussion moves between Islamic cultural norms, Pakistani traditional dress, and Turkish dramas without a tightly focused argument. While specific examples are provided, such as mentioning shalwar qameez and Western attire, the reasoning is underdeveloped and wanders into broad generalisations. Consequently, this performance fits the Band 5 descriptor where ideas are limited and partially developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, which is a positive structural attempt, but overall organisation lacks clear progression and logical flow. Cohesive devices are frequently misused, overused, or absent, making transitions jarring. Phrases such as 'In addition, people use the social media on daily bases' and 'First and foremost, the fashion badly effect' demonstrate inadequate control of cohesion. Furthermore, referencing is often confusing, and sentences within paragraphs do not always follow a coherent logical path, such as the sudden pivot to Turkish dramas in the third paragraph. This level of organisation aligns with the Band 4 descriptor, where information and ideas are not arranged fully coherently.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily impacted by word-form and collocation errors. The student relies on elementary terms and makes frequent errors, such as 'side of the approch society impressed', 'badly effect', 'daily bases', and 'bold dressing'. While the writer attempts less common vocabulary or topics (such as 'cultural trend' and 'global fashion'), inaccuracies in word choice are persistent. However, because the general topic remains discernible despite the errors, the response meets the threshold for Band 4, where vocabulary is basic and errors frequently strain the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple or attempted complex sentences that are heavily flawed. There is a near-absence of error-free sentences. Examples of serious grammatical errors include 'Because global fashion strong impact on individuals lives', 'teenagers mostly influenced through actors', and 'mostly parents are allowed to wearing dress like'. Subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and prepositions are faulty throughout the text. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and distort meaning at times, placing the grammatical control squarely at Band 4.

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