Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Nowadays, more and more people influenced by fashion trends This essay will explain How has global fashion influence on people's lives and argue that it is a negative development.
one main reason how global fashion influenced lives of people is social media and movie star's change the fashion of people by differant lifstyles and modern clothes by improved a new lifestyles this is because people want to change lifestyle and influced by new style for example footbal players show a new lifstyle and the social media can improve this style for cared by people and make them a trend and influced by more people for live a fake lives
One the other hand i think this is a negative development because spending money for people and when poor person want to leave like a famous person for example creat a new thinking for young people and make this trend this can change the main of lifestyle and make a problems woth poor people as a result poor people still a market shop and do crime for example for living a life like famous person and make pictures for living a role with this trends and more thing
in conclusion people want to live a fake lives by global fashion and this is a negative developlement and provid a negative effect for poor people and young people who want to live this trend i believe that social media make a fake trend with stupid people this can make nexte generation less intelegent
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the task prompt, identifying the causes of global fashion's influence (such as social media and celebrities) and stating a clear position that it is a negative development. However, the ideas are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting evidence. The arguments regarding poor people, crime, and young people becoming less intelligent are overly generalized and somewhat disjointed. For instance, stating that poor people 'do crime for example for living a life like famous person' is a weak assertion without logical elaboration. The response does touch upon the required elements of the task, but the lack of thorough explanation and extension places it firmly within Band 5, where ideas are limited and partially developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the overall organization and progression are weak. The introduction is poorly constructed, featuring a fragment instead of a complete sentence ('Nowadays, more and more people influenced by fashion trends This essay will explain...'). Cohesive devices are either missing, inadequate, or repetitive, with excessive use of run-on sentences connected by 'and'. For example, the second paragraph consists of one extremely long, convoluted sentence that fails to guide the reader logically from one point to the next. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is faulty, leading to a breakdown in logical progression. This level of organization aligns with Band 4 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice, morphology, and collocation. Examples include 'influced' for influenced, 'differant' for different, 'lifstyles' for lifestyles, and 'intelegent' for intelligent. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'development' and 'influence', but these are used repetitively and inaccurately, such as 'make a problems woth poor people' or 'provid a negative effect'. These lexical limitations and frequent spelling errors cause noticeable difficulty for the reader and reflect Band 4 performance.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the text. The majority of the essay consists of fragmented or poorly constructed run-on sentences lacking proper punctuation and capitalization. For instance, sentences like 'One the other hand i think this is a negative development because spending money for people and when poor person want to leave like a famous person...' demonstrate a severe lack of syntactic control. Complex structures are attempted but are consistently faulty, and basic rules of subject-verb agreement and tense consistency are frequently violated. There are very few error-free sentences, warranting a Band 4 score.
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