Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Many facts that the people have a significant influence of globl fashion. Individuals believe that trending fashion grabe the people lives strongly. In this essay i disscuss about the exaggerated fashion trend among the people , who has been adicting of fashion trend, according to the current situation of fashion ,it may be asumed that simplicity will may replace by the fashion. if this happend common man crushed by that trend. he has no resurc to adopt that . On the other hand high class people concider thier basic right to adopt the trend, for showing off in friends n colegues they are going to distroy our culture of simplicity .as a muslim we all froced to adopt simpl lifestyle, but we are going to adopt the westrn culture which is harmful for our new jenration . In my point of view globle fashion is a matter i pick a bone with it. and i totally bycourt this kind of rubbish trend which is giong to destroy our cultur as well as our adlson mind set . we all have a strong stand about that one to fix it .i personally feel that the global fashion has ruined the comman man life badly .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response addresses the prompt in a very limited way, attempting to discuss how global fashion influences people and giving a personal view on whether it is negative. However, the ideas are severely underdeveloped, highly emotional, and lack adequate supporting evidence. Furthermore, the length requirement has not been met, as the response contains only 204 words, falling significantly short of the 250-word minimum. Phrases like 'globl fashion' and 'rubbish trend' demonstrate an unfocused approach to academic task fulfillment, resulting in a weak presentation of position and arguments. The response meets the criteria for Band 4.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The overall organisation of the essay is extremely disjointed and fails to maintain logical progression. Paragraphing is chaotic, with erratic spacing and single-sentence paragraphs such as 'individuals believe that trending fashion grabe the people lives strongly.' Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, making it difficult to follow the flow of arguments. For example, 'On the other hand high class people...' is not appropriately contrasted with the previous section, and referencing is frequently unclear. The mechanical and faulty layout places the response firmly within Band 4.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily constrained. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, including 'globl', 'grabe', 'disscub', 'adicting', 'asumed', 'resurc', 'concider', 'distroy', 'froced', 'jenration', 'globle', 'bycourt', 'cultur', 'adlson', and 'comman'. These errors, alongside inappropriate informal choices like 'rubbish trend' and 'pick a bone with it', strain the reader's understanding and restrict the lexical range to a level that clearly matches Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical structures are very limited, consisting predominantly of simple sentences with frequent, severe errors that distort meaning. Examples include 'Many facts that the people have a significant influence of globl fashion', 'simplicity will may replace by the fashion', and 'if this happend common man crushed by that trend.' Punctuation and capitalization are poorly controlled, and subject-verb agreement is frequently violated, as seen in 'who has been adicting of fashion trend' and 'we all froced'. The high frequency of basic structural errors limits the score to Band 4.
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