Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Global fashion trends is the important and most influential factors that affect how we dress in our daily life.It greatly influenced how we dress, which is good at some extends but also have some negative impact.
Global fashion is not something that develop all of a sudden in our world. It is systemic system which predict the new trends in advance through multiple factors such as what people consuming, colour preferences, how we influence by our surroundings.
it is greatly affect the way we dress according to the event, gathering or occasion.However, in recent years the
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response is severely under-length at only 96 words compared to the minimum requirement of 250 words. Because of this extreme brevity, the essay only minimally addresses the prompt. While the writer attempts to introduce the topic by stating that 'Global fashion trends is the important and most influential factors,' the ideas remain completely underdeveloped. The writer mentions causes of fashion influence in the second paragraph ('what people consuming, colour preferences'), but abruptly cuts off at the end of the third paragraph before addressing the second half of the prompt regarding whether this development is positive or negative. Consequently, the task response is incomplete, warranting a low band score in this category.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The text is extremely brief, consisting of only two paragraphs and an incomplete third sentence. Although there are some logical links attempted, such as 'However, in recent years,' the overall organisation and progression of ideas cannot be properly established due to the unfinished nature of the text. Paragraphing is broken because the text terminates mid-thought. Cohesive devices are minimal, and referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'It is systemic system which predict the new trends.' Overall, the structural coherence is heavily compromised by the incomplete essay format.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student attempts some subject-specific vocabulary, such as 'global fashion trends,' 'influential factors,' and 'colour preferences.' However, the lexical range is very limited, and there are several noticeable vocabulary and collocation errors, such as 'Global fashion trends is' (subject-verb agreement error), 'It is systemic system' (missing article), and 'how we influence by our surroundings' (passive voice error). The misuse of these basic items causes some difficulty for the reader and restricts the lexical score to a modest level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The student uses a mix of simple sentence structures and attempts at slightly more complex forms, such as 'It greatly influenced how we dress, which is good at some extends but also have some negative impact.' However, grammatical accuracy is low. Notable errors include 'Global fashion trends is' instead of 'are', 'at some extends' instead of 'to some extent', and 'how we influence' instead of 'how we are influenced'. Punctuation and capitalization are also faulty, such as missing spaces after periods (e.g., 'daily life.It'). These frequent errors impede communication and reflect limited control over grammar.
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