Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The growth of fashion in people's lifestyle has changed a lot especially today's . This choice has a number of benefits and drawbacks which will be discussed in this essay .
Some of the most common reason for the change of the dressing sense of people is social media . Connecting with the world , especially meeting people from all around the world dropped an influence in today's fashion. Some adapting other country's trending fashion , and trying it out , giving rating to the outfits . The main motivation pulls people is by the influencers in certain social media like Instagram , Facebook and may other . Now the way trends the going , the change with fashion also change parallelly . Market place like shopping centres , local cheap markets , online app also goes by the trend . For example , an influencer visited any part of the world and start introducing and discussing about the outfit calling a very beautiful , cosy and and term with anything fashionable , market will introduced it common people with different price range and some influencer will make a review about the fashion .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The student attempts to address both parts of the prompt regarding why global fashion influences lives and whether this is positive or negative. However, the second part of the prompt concerning the evaluation of the development as positive or negative is entirely missing from the response. Furthermore, the length requirement of 250 words has not been met, as the response contains only 194 words. Ideas are limited and under-developed, with the discussion on social media remaining basic and lacking sufficient extension and relevant examples. Based on these limitations, the response falls into Band 4.0 for Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organisation of the text is severely impacted by extremely short and underdeveloped paragraphs. The introduction consists of only two sentences, and the main body paragraph attempts to cover multiple disparate ideas without logical progression or clear structuring. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, or inaccurate, such as 'Now the way trends the going, the change with fashion also change parallelly'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow the logical flow of ideas. Paragraphing is not used effectively, leading to an overall arrangement that lacks clear overall progression.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with limited range appropriate for an academic task. Examples such as 'dressing sense', 'local cheap markets', and 'online app' demonstrate a restricted lexical scope. There are noticeable word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'the main motivation pulls people is by the influencers' and 'calling a very beautiful, cosy and and term with anything fashionable'. These lexical inadequacies cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a limited vocabulary that is minimally adequate at best.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, with frequent basic errors that distort meaning and impede communication. Sentence structures are often fragmented or ungrammatical, such as 'Connecting with the world , especially meeting people from all around the world dropped an influence in today's fashion' and 'For example , an influencer visited any part of the world and start introducing and discussing about the outfit calling a very beautiful'. Verb tense inconsistencies and incorrect prepositions are pervasive throughout the text. Due to the high frequency of errors and lack of complex sentence control, the response aligns with Band 4.0.
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