Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Many demansion of the way of individuals outfit nowadays attract by world wide fashion sense .how has world wide fashion become to much strong impact on numbers lives . As per my openion , a good impact on our society because people want to do something for matching or similartity in society , Competations,personality grooming , Better survival, rise standard.

Overall , A good fashion sense make you a very charm personality in your community . Nowadays people impress by many actor who performed in a fashion shows , so people attract to watching her outfit and want to also wear same dress. Whatever individuals want to compete other who llive in society ,due to competation start mostly in female . I.e I know a family who lived in very porsh area of our Capital city . So her husband earn money and she spend on every upcoming trend . Little bit funny but she do same thing and repeat.because she very impress by fashion show . Well mostly people live in society in below of poverty line . they not able to buy or compete the level of society and taking streess when someone good outfit but they have nothing to wear whatever, they have nothing to eat , not fair for other people who not compete the society and just earn for basic expense .

morever, As per my openion highly impress by fashion desighner is good because if you want to copete the society you must something to do becuase if you are doing nothing then you are not able to but something . So as per my mind they influanceing from someone give to you a chellange and you must accept a good chellang to achive

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response attempts to address both parts of the prompt regarding why global fashion has a strong influence and whether this is positive or negative. The writer suggests it is positive for personality grooming and competition, but the ideas are severely underdeveloped, repetitive, and lack clear support. For example, the mention of a family living in a posh area attempting to keep up with trends is vague and confusingly linked to the broader argument. The position is stated but not consistently maintained due to fragmented reasoning and disjointed thoughts, particularly when discussing poverty and competition. This performance aligns closely with Band 4 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response lacks clear overall progression and logical organisation. Paragraphing is highly problematic, with the second paragraph running on across multiple disparate points without clear transitions or structure. Cohesive devices are used minimally and frequently incorrectly, such as 'morever, As per my openion highly impress by fashion desighner is good'. Referencing is frequently unclear (e.g., 'she very impress', 'they have nothing to wear whatever'), making it difficult to follow the relationships between ideas. The overall arrangement of information is disjointed, which reflects Band 4 descriptors.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, highly repetitive, and heavily impacted by word-choice and spelling errors that frequently strain the reader. Examples of inaccurate terms include 'demansion' for dimensions, 'outfit' used as a verb ('attract by world wide fashion sense'), and 'openion' for opinion. Attempts to use less common or academic vocabulary result in severe collocation errors, such as 'porsh area' and 'rise standard'. The limited range and constant errors place this response firmly in the Band 4 category.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting predominantly of simple or fragmented sentences with frequent structural failures. Complex sentences are rarely attempted, and when they are, they are heavily flawed, such as in 'Well mostly people live in society in below of poverty line . they not able to buy or compete the level of society and taking streess when someone good outfit'. Errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, articles, and punctuation occur throughout every sentence, frequently distorting the intended meaning and causing severe difficulty for the reader. This corresponds to Band 4.

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