Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Global fashion trend is the way of wearing dress and bring new things in dresses designs.people who is active on social media platforms they are more influenced by global fashion trends.It bring positive changes in people personalities, But many people who has no money feel inferiority complex so its a negative aspect of tis trend.But he have also negative impact By global fashion trends many people who has no money feel inferiority complex so its a negative aspect of tis trend.But he have also negative impact.Global fashion trend is the way of wearing dress and bring new things in dresses designs.people who is active on social media platforms they are more influenced by global fashion trends.It bring positive changes in people personalities, But many people who has no money feel inferiority complex so its a negative aspect of tis trend.But he have also negative impact By global fashion trends many people who has no money feel inferiority complex so its a negative aspect of tis trend.But he have also negative impact. Global fashion trend is the way of wearing dress and bring new things in dresses designs.people who is active on social media platforms they are more influenced by global fashion trends.It bring positive changes in people personalities, But many people who has no money feel inferiority complex so its a negative aspect of tis trend.But he have also negative impact By global fashion trends many people who has no money feel inferiority complex so its a negative aspect of tis trend.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response attempts to address both parts of the prompt regarding how global fashion influences people's lives and whether this is a positive or negative development. However, the severe repetition of ideas severely limits the development of the task. The same phrases, such as 'Global fashion trend is the way of wearing dress' and 'many people who has no money feel inferiority complex', are copied and pasted multiple times throughout the response. Because the text consists almost entirely of repetitive loops rather than an extended, coherent progression of distinct ideas, the response falls short of fully addressing all parts of the task in a sustained manner, earning a band score of 4.5.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Coherence and cohesion are severely compromised in this response due to the constant, mechanical repetition of whole blocks of text. There is a complete lack of proper paragraphing, as the essay is presented as repetitive chunks without a clear overall structure, introduction, body paragraphs, or conclusion. While some basic cohesive devices like 'But' are used, referencing is highly repetitive and confusing. There is no logical progression of ideas because the same sentences are reiterated word-for-word multiple times. Consequently, the organization fails to meet the standards for higher bands, resulting in a band score of 4.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is extremely basic and repetitive, such as 'fashion trend', 'dresses designs', 'social media platforms', and 'inferiority complex'. Because the student repeats the exact same sentences multiple times, the range of vocabulary displayed is extremely limited and lacks flexibility or precision. There are also lexical inaccuracies, such as 'wearing dress' instead of 'dressing' or 'wearing clothes', and 'dresses designs' instead of 'dress designs'. While the key terms of the prompt are attempted, the severe repetition and lack of a varied, adequate range restrict the lexical score to 4.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting primarily of repetitive, simple and flawed complex sentence structures. There are several noticeable grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues in 'people who is active' and 'people who has no money', as well as pronoun confusion in 'But he have also negative impact'. Punctuation is also poorly handled, with missing spaces after commas and periods. Because these errors occur repeatedly alongside a very narrow range of sentence patterns, and because the majority of the text is simply duplicated, the grammatical control is weak, justifying a band score of 4.0.

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