Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Today, global fashion trends have become the great influencer on the dress code of people across the world. The reason behind this strong affection of people towards fashion trends is the influence of social media. I believe this is a negative development because of its negative impact on youngsters and the financial pressure it creates in a family.

Everyone has access to the social media these days, where they scroll through thousands of news and advertisements. When people see public figures and actors following a particular fashion, a mindset gets developed in them, where they think attractive dressing will help them to get more attraction in the society. This makes a greater section of society follow the fashion trends. For example, when a music event gets viral, a large number of people tend to emitate the dressing style of the artists to make themselves look cool in the society.

However, there are numerous drawbacks associated with this practice. This practice can place parents on financial burdens. This is because their children may insist to buy expensive dresses after being influenced by the contemporary fashion trends. This may be problematic to those parents whose daily income is even not enough to fulfill their basic needs. Moreover, in many cases it is found that children are adopting other wrong habits while following these fashion trends. For example, smoking is being highly associated with hip-hop dressing where children try to smoke to make themselves look more attractive among others.

In conclusion, advertisements and online media play a great role in spreading various fashion styles across the different parts of the world. Nevertheless, sometimes the financial problem and detrimental habits that youngsters develop parallelly with this trend make it a more negative issue.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task, presenting both the reasons behind the influence of global fashion and a clear position that it is a negative development. The introduction outlines your view directly, and the body paragraphs tackle the two key aspects requested by the prompt: social media influence and the drawbacks of this trend. However, some ideas are more fully developed than others. For instance, the explanation of social media and public figures in the second paragraph is fairly well supported with an example about a viral music event, but the points raised in the third paragraph regarding financial burdens and behavioral habits are slightly less extended and could benefit from further elaboration to fully meet higher standards. Overall, your main arguments remain relevant and clearly focused throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The essay demonstrates a coherent overall arrangement with a clear logical progression from introduction to body paragraphs and conclusion. Each paragraph has a distinct focus, starting with the causes of fashion trends, followed by financial and behavioral drawbacks, and wrapping up nicely. You make use of various cohesive devices to link your ideas together, such as 'However', 'This is because', and 'In conclusion'. However, cohesion occasionally feels slightly mechanical, and referencing is not always completely smooth, as seen with repetitive transitions like 'For example' used consecutively across paragraphs. Furthermore, while paragraphing is used appropriately, the handling of cohesive ties sits right on the border, showing a clear logical structure while occasionally relying on formulaic connectors rather than more sophisticated referencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

Your vocabulary provides an adequate range for the task, allowing you to discuss fashion and its societal impacts reasonably well using terms like 'global fashion trends', 'public figures', and 'financial burdens'. You attempt less common vocabulary, such as 'contemporary fashion trends' and 'detrimental habits', but this is occasionally accompanied by some inaccuracy in word choice and collocation. For example, phrasing like 'the great influencer on the dress code' or 'affection of people towards fashion' sounds slightly unnatural, and you use 'emitate' instead of 'imitate'. There are also minor lexical slips that prevent the writing from achieving greater precision, though the errors do not impede communication overall, ensuring your intended meaning remains clear to the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing structures like relative clauses and conditional-style reasoning effectively to explain your points. There are some errors in grammar and punctuation throughout the text, such as article usage and prepositions within grammatical patterns—for instance, writing 'access to the social media' instead of 'access to social media', or 'place parents on financial burdens' rather than 'place a financial burden on parents'. You also write 'children may insist to buy' instead of 'insist on buying'. Nevertheless, these errors are relatively infrequent and rarely impede communication, allowing your sentences to remain largely understandable while maintaining a functional control of grammar.

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