Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Now a days, global fashion become such a strong influence on certain types of people's lives. Today's generation are too much connected with global fashion. It has positive and negative both sides. I will describe it with my own relevant example in further passeges.
In todays, people are motivated with another people or influencer. There are so many people around us who follows global fashion and try to conveince us to adopt global fashion.Global fashion is very common to use. Now a days, people want to be very different and try western fashion in particular events. In old times people didn't have more options for event or jobs.But today we have so many types of clothes,shoes, and accesories. People influenced by actor and actress more. For example, When bollywood film realese in cinema people go there to enjoy but around us there are so many people think to use actor or actress fashion and buy new things to look different than others they dont's see whether it is needed or not they just buy and showoff infront of others.
It has negative impact of those people who are not able to purchase costly things to use modern fashion. For example, the people who come from middle class family they don't have more money to use in certain things but they stubbern with their parents and purchase things and showoff.
In coclusion, I would like to say that if we use global fashion is good but avoid showoff and try to use different fashion it become more expensive for parents to fullfil our need of modern fashion.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses the main parts of the prompt by discussing why global fashion influences people and whether this is positive or negative, but the ideas remain limited and under-developed. For example, while the writer mentions the influence of actors and Bollywood films, the explanation is repetitive and focuses mainly on the idea of buying things to 'showoff' rather than exploring broader cultural or economic impacts. Furthermore, the position is not always clear, as the introduction states 'It has positive and negative both sides,' but the body paragraphs lean heavily into negative aspects without a balanced evaluation. To improve, the writer needs to fully extend and support ideas with more specific explanations and maintain a clearly defined stance throughout.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
There is some organisation evident in the division into paragraphs, but the response lacks a clear overall progression. The movement between ideas feels abrupt, and cohesive devices are sometimes inadequate, inaccurate, or repetitive. For instance, the transition 'In todays' is used awkwardly to open the second paragraph, and referencing is occasionally unclear, as seen in phrases like 'another people' or 'those people who are not able'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the conclusion is brief and lacks cohesive strength, summarizing the argument somewhat mechanically with phrases like 'In coclusion'. To move to a higher level, the writer must ensure logical sequencing from sentence to sentence and employ a wider, more accurate range of cohesive devices to guide the reader smoothly through the argument.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The writer relies heavily on basic words and phrases such as 'global fashion', 'people', and 'buy things', while noticeable errors in word choice and word form cause some difficulty for the reader. Examples include 'conveince', 'realese', 'accesories', and 'stubbern' instead of 'stubborn'. Additionally, collocations are frequently unnatural, such as 'use modern fashion' instead of 'wear modern fashion' or 'follow modern fashion'. To achieve a higher band, the writer needs to incorporate a wider range of less common vocabulary with greater precision, paying closer attention to correct spelling, word forms, and natural collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response demonstrates a very limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent errors in complex attempts. There are recurrent issues with verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and articles, such as 'Now a days, global fashion become' and 'the people who come from middle class family they don't have'. Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences and missing commas affecting readability. Errors are frequent and often cause strain for the reader, particularly in sentences like 'when bollywood film realese in cinema people go there to enjoy but around us there are so many people think to use actor or actress fashion'. To improve, the writer must work on basic grammatical accuracy, sentence boundary control, and the correct formation of subordinate clauses.
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