Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the growing Era,their are many developments are now changes into the day to day life and also their is changes in the fashion style by the influance by the global fashion trends therefore,trending fashion style was strongly influence on people's lives and also tranform their cultures by this trends In my opinion,the merits of the given statement surpass it merits.

The above statement leads to several consequences.primarily,every one can not afford to followe the global fashion trends that are actualy happening in their surrounding.In other words,people can buy their products reguard to their needs and also they can not affprd to much cost of budget into the heavy products.mainely global products are alos have their own goverments taxes and high import rates so people are try to ought their own nation products for example,indian govenments are always say to their nation to my swadesh products so theyr can easily helping to their local communites and growing each other so its was the impect on middle class.

On the other hand, various practical measures may be implemented to address the issue.Firstly, people are check new trends on online platform like social medias and other trending fashion brand and try to make that same item in their reduce of costing and in their own nation it was very cheaper than the compare to the global brand and also this step are very helpfull for their sounding local and high class familyes.Apart from this,its was good for their locality and grow with helping of each other.To exemplify it some korean fabrics are manufacturing in surat so people can buy hat fabrics from their own nation and also they check the fabric quality withot going to korea.

Overall,global fashion trends is the way to know the trends on another nations and also its heping each other to grow also it was the highly strong influence on the people's need.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response attempts to address both parts of the prompt regarding global fashion influences and whether it is a positive or negative development, stating an opinion that the merits surpass the negatives. However, the ideas remain limited and under-developed. For instance, the discussion around financial constraints and national products such as Indian 'swadesh' and local communities lacks clear elaboration and logical extension. The development tends to wander into repetitive assertions rather than thoroughly exploring the impacts of global trends on modern life. To move to a higher level, the writer would need to fully develop their main ideas with more cohesive, relevant supporting details and clear, sustained argumentation throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the essay into paragraphs with some structural signposting such as 'The above statement leads to several consequences' and 'On the other hand'. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because of mechanical and inaccurate use of cohesive devices, and a lack of clear logical sequencing between sentences. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the mechanical transitions do not successfully link the ideas together. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak. To improve coherence and cohesion, the writer should focus on using logical relationships between sentences, ensuring that referencing pronouns clearly point to their antecedents, and building a smoother, more natural progression of ideas from one paragraph to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, demonstrating a limited range that barely meets the task requirements. There are noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling throughout the response, such as 'influanic', 'affprd', 'mainely', 'reguard', and 'soundings', which frequently strain the reader's comprehension. While the student attempts to use some less common items like 'consequences' and 'manufacturings', inaccurate word choices impede precision. To achieve a higher score, the writer needs to expand their lexical repertoire, pay closer attention to word formation and spelling, and select more precise, context-appropriate terminology to express their thoughts clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is very limited, relying heavily on faulty attempts at complex structures that contain frequent errors. Sentences often suffer from severe structural issues, such as missing subjects, incorrect verb tenses, poor subject-verb agreement, and run-on structures without proper punctuation control, seen in phrases like 'their are many developments are now changes'. Punctuation is also inconsistently applied. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader in grasping the intended meaning. To progress, the writer must build a stronger foundation in basic sentence construction, ensure correct verb forms and subject-verb agreement, and exercise greater control over simple and complex sentence patterns.

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