Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trend because people are living in mordarn and gowring world era so people are infulicne global fashion so i dicesd some pont of viwe.
to begin with me. fastly people are use socile media and saw thare favrat actor and see thare dress so they are infulance and people are buy new cloths and globle fashion indursty are grow and mostlye people are buy this type of dress age tape is 15 to 25 becuse they are see movie and web sirus. so fashion in indursty are groeing and world tarde are grow.also so people are buy drees and they are post socol media and so in world see internationl people so people are see our country are dress senes are vrey good so very internationl indursty are come our country so our cunrty are grow and our cuntry devlapment in peak so drees in postive for davelopment.
in the onter hand. people are goin other country and they are talk to interntionl people and internationl people are see our country drees seens so in our country riparidant in our coountry are rich and have good sens od waire drees .
in conculiosn. people are people sre today ware drees and global fashion trends so theinternatol people are happy are happy becus i warw internationl drees.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response responds to the task only minimally and tangentially. First, it must be noted that the response falls short of the minimum length requirement, containing only 216 words, with 13 words copied directly from the task prompt excluded from the count. The ideas presented are extremely limited and under-developed. While the writer attempts to address the two prompts concerning how global fashion influences lives and whether this is a positive or negative development, the points are extremely repetitive and lack proper supporting arguments or relevant examples. Statements such as 'fastly people are use socile media and saw thare favrat actor' attempt to touch upon the influence of media and celebrities, but the overall lack of development and failure to meet the minimum word count keep this section at a minimal level of task fulfillment.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
Information and ideas are not arranged coherently throughout the response. The text is divided into basic paragraphs, but the overall progression of ideas is difficult to follow due to a lack of clear logical organization. The essay relies heavily on repetitive transitions and rudimentary connectors such as 'to begin with me', 'fastly', and 'in the onter hand'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it hard for the reader to determine what pronouns like 'they' or 'this' refer to. To move towards a higher level of coherence and cohesion, the writer needs to ensure a logical flow of ideas, use a wider and more accurate range of cohesive devices without overusing them, and structure paragraphs with clear topic sentences and supporting details.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and highly repetitive, with frequent errors that strain the reader's understanding. The student relies on elementary words and struggles with accurate word formation, word choice, and spelling. Numerous non-standard or misspelled forms appear throughout the text, such as 'mordarn', 'gowring', 'infulicne', 'socile', 'favrat', 'globle', 'indursty', 'sirus', 'tarde', 'socol', 'riparidant', and 'conculiosn'. These lexical inadequacies significantly impede communication and restrict the expression of ideas to a very basic level. To improve, the writer needs to expand their vocabulary range, learn the correct spelling and word forms of common academic terms, and focus on precise word choice rather than repeating simple phrases.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, with errors being extremely frequent and often distorting meaning. Simple sentence forms are handled poorly, and there are virtually no successful complex sentences. Basic rules of grammar, verb forms, tenses, subject-verb agreement, and articles are consistently broken, as seen in examples like 'people are use socile media', 'people are buy new cloths', and 'so people are buy drees and they are post socol media'. Punctuation is also heavily neglected, with run-on sentences and missing capitalization throughout. To achieve a higher score, the writer must focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring accurate verb tenses and agreements, and reducing the frequency of foundational grammatical errors.
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