Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In recent years, people's clothing choices around the world have been heavily shaped by international fashion. Everyone influened by global fashion trends because of the internet.
Global fashion has become powerful because of tecnology. Today, everybody use technology in thier every field of life. People used diifferent apps on thier mobile phones to influenced by globalfashion trends. Like Tiktok, Instagram, Facebooks and many others. With the help of these apps young people can able to check new trends all over the world. For instance, if a celebrity wear a fashionable dress on some event, everyone try to copy that dress as soon as possible. Many international brands now available in Pakistan like ZARA and Adidas. So, we can easily buy clothes of this brand from Pakistan. We don't have to go abroad for take these trending clothes of these famous brands.The other fact is Online Shopping. It makes very easy for people to buy clothes from anywhere.
People influenced by global fashion trends, I think this is a positive development. Young people wear pents and western clothes on different events according to the trend. It enhance thier personality and make them more confident. They know the cultures of the other countries. If they have to go other countries, they don't need to face any difficulty in choosing the clothes. They already know the trends of the world because of the internet.
In conclusion, this is a good aspect of people that they influenced by global fashion trends. It makes them more confident about thier personality. They are able to know the cultures of the other countries and don't have to face difficulty.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
Your response addresses the two main parts of the prompt regarding why global fashion is influential and whether this is positive or negative. However, your position is not always clearly sustained throughout, and your ideas are somewhat limited and under-developed. For instance, while you mention that technology and apps like TikTok and Instagram allow people to follow trends, your explanation relies on simple examples like copying a celebrity's dress, rather than exploring deeper social or economic drivers. Similarly, your supporting points for why this is a positive development—such as enhancing personality and wearing western clothes on different events—remain surface-level. To move higher, you need to extend your arguments further, providing fully developed explanations and maintaining a thoroughly clear, well-supported position from start to finish.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
Your essay displays some organisation with basic paragraphing, separating your introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. However, there is no clear overall progression throughout the text, and cohesive devices are frequently inadequate, inaccurate, or repetitive. For example, sentences often start abruptly without smooth transitional phrases linking them to the preceding thoughts, as seen with 'The other fact is Online Shopping.' and 'People influenced by global fashion trends, I think this is a positive development.' Referencing is also occasionally unclear, and paragraph transitions feel mechanical. To achieve a higher band, you must ensure that your ideas logically sequence one another with a clearer overall progression and a more flexible, accurate use of cohesive devices to guide the reader seamlessly through your arguments.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You demonstrate a limited but minimally adequate range of vocabulary suitable for discussing fashion and technology, using terms like 'international fashion', 'celebrity', 'online shopping', and 'brands'. However, there are noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. For example, you wrote 'influened' instead of 'influenced', 'diifferent' instead of 'different', 'thier' instead of 'their', and 'Facebook' with an unnecessary plural. Furthermore, phrases like 'for take these trending clothes' demonstrate awkward lexical collocation and word forms. To improve your lexical score, you need to expand your range of less common vocabulary and pay close attention to accurate spelling and word formation to ensure smooth communication without distracting errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
Your writing relies on a limited range of sentence structures, featuring mostly simple sentences and straightforward statements. When you attempt complex sentences, they are often faulty, such as 'Everyone influened by global fashion trends because of the internet.' and 'young people can able to check new trends'. There are frequent errors in grammar, including missing auxiliary verbs ('everyone try to copy'), incorrect verb forms ('brands now available'), and subject-verb agreement issues. Punctuation and article usage also need refinement. To reach the next level, you should practice incorporating a wider variety of complex grammatical structures accurately, ensuring that the majority of your sentences are well-controlled and free from frequent basic errors.
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