Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the modern era , every one want to follow trend . Many people wear that clothes which are influnse by global trend. In my point of view it is negative development because it is very expensive and they drag from their culture . This essay will discuss both questions .
On the one hand , global trend has significant on peolpe 's daily life . Every one use social media such as instagram , snapchart and facebook for watching reels and videos . But on social media some celebrties wear lucrative graments as a result people can influse or try that clothes . celebrties wear always expensive. In recent times people like to dress in international clother . for instance , people offten dress as formal attire such as pants and shirts .It is international clothes and it is very comfortable for work .
on the other hand , i believe that it have many disadvantages . If people don treanding clothes it put financial pressure on their pocket . Furthermore , people put on fashionable outfits then people are less interseted to wear tradtional clothes as a result it drag trational clothes from human life . People wear fasionable clothes with this poor class people also want to wear that clothes . when they watch any people who be dressed in fasionable garments their fellings very heart . The global trend also put pressur on fashion creaters because they need to change and stitchnew type of clothes
In conclusion , trending clothes are followed by celebrties . but it is very expensive for middle class and it replace tradtional clothes . In y opinion it is negative development . people should maintain balnace between tradtional and treanding clothes
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses all parts of the prompt, attempting to explain both how global fashion influences lives and whether this development is positive or negative. However, the ideas remain limited and under-developed, which restricts the depth of the discussion. For instance, the points about social media influence and financial pressure are introduced but lack fully elaborated support or extended examples. The student takes a clear position by stating that the trend is a negative development, but the overall presentation of arguments tends to be repetitive, particularly regarding expense and the replacement of traditional clothing.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
There is a clear attempt at paragraphing with an introduction, body paragraphs addressing different aspects of the prompt, and a conclusion. However, the overall progression lacks smooth logical flow. Cohesive devices are frequently inadequate, inaccurate, or overused, such as the repetitive mechanical transitions like 'On the one hand' and 'on the other hand' which are sometimes incorrectly lowercased or punctuated. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, such as pronoun use in sentences like 'when they watch any people who be dressed in fasionable garments their fellings very heart', leading to a choppy and disjointed reading experience.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task, with noticeable errors in word choice, spelling, and word form that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. The student attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'lucrative graments' (intended as luxurious garments) and 'tradtional', but these attempts feature frequent spelling mistakes ('influnse', 'celebrties', 'interseted', 'fasionable') and inaccurate collocations. The lexical range restricts the precision needed to express more complex ideas effectively about global fashion trends and cultural impacts.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The writing demonstrates a limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences alongside a few poorly controlled complex attempts. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('every one want', 'it have many disadvantages'), missing articles ('put financial pressure on their pocket'), incorrect verb forms ('people don treanding clothes', 'who be dressed'), and awkward prepositional or clausal phrasing. These frequent errors in grammar and punctuation can cause noticeable difficulty for the reader and distort meaning in places.
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