Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In today's world, globalisation is incearsing day by day. some people believe that global fashion trends effect on people's lifestyle. I think it is negative development. This essay will intend to discuss viewpoints in the upcoming paragraphs.

To commence with, there are plethora of reasons why this trend is so popular. First of all, people go on trips with their family or close ones in other states and the try their clothes because they like to wear other country's clothes. However, some multitudes influenced by social media and they also try there trends. Many Indians wear western clothes in their country because they believe luxury clothes show their wealts and social status. Moreover, foreigner's wear Indians clothes becuase they like it and they also spemd large amount of money to buy luxury clothes as well as accessiore. Some people by influenced by eachother. Industries are fastly growing in recent years and they also make new trends. Multitudes try new fashion trends.

On the other hand, others believe that popularity of fashion, lifestyle and consumer goods not importatnt part of peole's lives. Some people spend a too much time on screens which can negative impact on their health and they also create many health related problems. However, they spend lot of money to try new fashion trends which can help insustries to grow their income and they buy luxury items in their industries. They can aslo effect country's economy. Some people spend a lot of costs on trips which can create serious finacial problems in their life.

In conclusion, global fasgion become a strong infulence on people's lives which can negative impact on their lifestyle. an

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You state a clear overall view—“I think it is negative development”—and offer relevant possible influences, including travel, social media, status, and the growth of fashion industries. However, the task is only partly addressed: the explanation of how global fashion became influential is a list of possible causes rather than a developed account, and the second part shifts between health, spending, industry income, and the economy without clearly explaining why these make the development negative. The conclusion repeats your view but does not draw the main reasons together. Develop two or three central ideas with specific explanations or examples, and make sure each paragraph directly supports your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, so there is a basic attempt to organise the answer. Some progression is visible: the first body paragraph discusses influences, while the next considers possible effects. However, the ideas within both paragraphs are loosely connected, and the second paragraph begins “On the other hand” without presenting a clear opposing view. Connectors such as “However” and “Moreover” sometimes introduce ideas that do not contrast or extend the previous point. References such as “they” are also unclear in places. Group related points into a clear sequence, use linking phrases according to their meaning, and make each paragraph’s main point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “global fashion trends,” “social status,” “luxury clothes,” and “financial problems.” This gives you some means of discussing influence and its effects. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to follow, such as “effect on people’s lifestyle,” “spend a lot of costs,” and “industries to grow their income.” Spelling errors—including “incearsing,” “wealts,” and “fasgion”—also occur noticeably. Build a bank of accurate topic phrases and check spelling carefully; prioritise natural combinations such as “influence people’s lifestyles,” “spend large sums,” and “increase industry revenue.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You use some longer sentence attempts, including clauses beginning with “because” and “which,” as well as simple statements that communicate your general position. However, the range of structures is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty. For example, “some people believe that global fashion trends effect on people’s lifestyle” lacks a correctly formed verb pattern, while “Some people spend a too much time” has an article and quantifier problem. There are also errors in agreement and sentence construction, as in “which can negative impact.” These issues sometimes make relationships between ideas hard to understand. Practise accurate basic clause patterns first, then add subordinate clauses and check articles, verb forms, and punctuation.

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