Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It has been observed that, popularity in the way of dressing has been increased in the today's era by world wide trends. There are many aspects of this trends behind the strong influence in fashion. In my perception, this is a positive development and my stance is juatified in upcoming write-up with valid reasons and appropriate examples.

The fundamental reason for my inclination is that variety of cloths individuals buys according to their body types, to means that all round the world, for people to wear same traditional cloths is not possible for them to wear but when they get explore many brands according to their types and prefrences to what to wear or not. For example, people often explore brand such as h&m, gucci or nike to get variety of option for purchase.

On the other hand, affordibility to explain this, some of brands have many option for the people regarding thier interest and thier type with the huge price tage but for some people who are the part of society and they want to wear that types of cloths but thier income level is too low so they can afford this so this is the negative things for the society.

In conclusion, this eassy has many

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear opinion—“this is a positive development”—and give a relevant example of international brands, so the response does engage with the topic. However, the task asks both how global fashion became influential and whether this is positive or negative. The explanation of its influence is only briefly suggested through choice and brand variety; the response does not explain the role of media, online shopping, or celebrity influence, for instance. Your positive position is also weakened by a paragraph that introduces affordability as a negative without resolving this contrast, and the conclusion is unfinished (“this essay has many…”). The response is 208 words, below the required 250, which further limits the development of your ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an identifiable introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion attempt, and phrases such as “For example” and “On the other hand” show an effort to connect ideas. However, progression is difficult to follow because the first body paragraph contains several ideas in one long, unclear sentence, and the second begins with the fragment-like “On the other hand, affordability to explain this.” The contrast between your positive view and the affordability concern is not clearly managed. The final sentence is incomplete, so the essay does not reach a clear ending. Use one main point per paragraph, explain how each point supports your position, and finish with a complete summary.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “traditional clothes,” “brands,” “body types,” “preferences,” and “income level,” which helps communicate the general subject. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “fundamental reason” and “positive development.” However, word choice and spelling are often inaccurate or awkward, including “popularity in the way of dressing,” “cloths,” “price tage,” and “affordibility.” Repetition of “people,” “types,” and “cloths” also limits range, while phrases such as “variety of option for purchase” are not natural collocations. Build a more precise fashion-related vocabulary and check spelling and word forms so your meaning is easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the opening includes a clear statement of your position. However, control is inconsistent, especially in longer sentences. For example, “variety of cloths individuals buys according to their body types” has problems with sentence structure and subject–verb agreement, while “for people to wear same traditional cloths is not possible for them to wear” is difficult to interpret. Articles and plurals are also often missing or inaccurate, as in “same traditional cloths” and “many option.” The conclusion, “this essay has many,” is incomplete. Aim first for accurate, complete sentences; then connect them with clauses using clear grammatical patterns.

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