Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In today's rapidly changing world, social media has played a crucial role in spreading the fashion all around the world. Many people use social media apps like Instagram, Tiktoke, Facebook, Twitter and YouTube. They follow their favorite celebrities' on these apps and influence by their fashion sense. As a result, many clothing items can become popular in many parts of the world within a short period. For example, a jacket promoting by a influencer may attract thousand of young costumers all over the world. Some people believe that society must be will to change and adopt, while others argue that it has many drawbacks on our society. This essay will discuss both the positive and negative side of this phenomena.

on the positive side, it develop economic benefits. Its creates many jobs in local areas. For example, due to the globalization many companies area have already opened their branches in many countries. Such as Zara pent brand has many branches in India, Pakistan and Dubai, it creates many jobs like guard, costumer servicer and receptionist.

Fashion gives people a real sense of freedom. it allows people preference and creativity.

However, one of the significant disadvantage is environmental damage. Technology has made is easier to find any type of the clothes across the global. For example, there are many online platforms such as Amazon, AliExpress, Temu and Ebay etc that provide all type of clothing in each country. So, when individuals influence by their celebrity that buy clothes from these websites and throw their old clothes that can damage our environment such as dirty water and greenhouse gasses . As a result, issues related to health are emerged like asthma, skin infection and typhoid. Furthermore, some people just waste money to buy unnecessary new clothes to follow the trend, while their existing clothes are still useful and in good condition.

In conclusion, although fashion trend creates many job across the world and reduced unemployment in many countries. however, it also creates serious environment problems, health issues and waste of money.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: the opening explains how social media and celebrities spread trends, and the essay considers benefits and drawbacks. The environmental impact and unnecessary spending are relevant, while the point that fashion creates jobs gives a positive perspective. However, the response only partly develops the task. The positive discussion is brief, and the claim that global fashion creates jobs is not clearly connected to how fashion trends influence people’s lives. The question asks for your own judgement, but the conclusion mainly lists advantages and disadvantages rather than clearly stating whether you consider the development positive or negative. Develop each main idea with a clear explanation and example, and state your overall position directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, separate discussion of benefits and drawbacks, and a conclusion, so there is some overall organisation. The sequence from social media to global popularity is understandable, and signposts such as “However” help mark a contrast. Nevertheless, progression is uneven: the introduction promises a discussion of both sides, but the positive paragraph is very short and the essay moves abruptly from job creation to personal freedom. Some links are unclear, particularly the connection between online clothing sales, discarded clothes, pollution and health problems. The conclusion also repeats points without resolving the position. Use a clearer paragraph plan, develop one central idea at a time, and make cause-and-effect links explicit rather than relying on “For example” and “As a result.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “global fashion trends,” “celebrities,” “environmental damage,” “greenhouse gases” and “unnecessary new clothes.” This gives the reader a basic understanding of the subject. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices, collocations and spelling errors make parts difficult to follow. Examples include “influence by their fashion sense,” “a jacket promoting by a influencer,” “costumers,” and “dirty water.” Some phrases are repeated, such as “creates many jobs,” and “all type of clothing” is imprecise. Build a wider set of accurate expressions for trends, consumer behaviour and environmental effects, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise vocabulary would make your explanations clearer and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a relative clause in “a jacket promoting by a influencer may attract…” and a conditional-style explanation of the effects of buying and discarding clothes. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in verb forms, agreement, articles, plurals and sentence boundaries. For example, “it develop economic benefits” and “Its creates many jobs” have incorrect verb forms, while “when individuals influence by their celebrity” is missing a necessary verb form. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, especially at the starts of sentences and around “however.” These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas hard to interpret. Practise accurate subject–verb patterns and past participles, then proofread each sentence for a complete clause and correct punctuation.

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