Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Numerous aspects of the way individuals dress today are influenced by world fashion trends. I think this is a negative ddevelopment on people as there are different aspects.

In these days people see on social media what others are wearing and they inculcate those trends or fashion in their life as well. This has mainly made the people to forget their culture, tradition and they follow other customs rather than following their own tradition. Nowadays individuals travel to different nations and gets influenced by the brands, and other factors and this cause different issues to their personal life as well. For instance, a married couple goes to a vacation to a different country and see the fashion and gets influenced by others to wear different kinds of clothes, here people easily gets differnt ideas on fashion and start following those in their place.

Furthermore, this is considered only when it is necessary to wear different clothes and also occasionally. But in past few decades people do not wear traditional dress everywhere because mainly people think that what others think if they wera those clothes to a mall or a party and even they do not wear treaditional dress in festivals. This global fashion has affected individual's life in a adverse way as people get inluence by others easily.

In conclusion, people should not get influenced by other global fashion and should folloe their customs and maintain that in their society. This creates an awareness and also a small change can bring lot of impact on others and help them to follow with pride.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear negative view, especially in the conclusion, and identify social media and travel as ways global fashion spreads. However, the task asks both how fashion became influential and whether this is positive or negative, and the explanation is only partly developed. The social-media point is relevant, but the travel example mainly describes a couple copying clothes rather than explaining the broader influence of global trends. The negative effects—such as reduced use of traditional clothing—are repeated, but not supported with sufficiently clear reasons or specific examples. Develop each part more fully: explain how online platforms, advertising, celebrities, or international brands expose people to trends, then weigh the effects and support your position with a focused example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its overall direction. Linking expressions such as “Furthermore” and “In conclusion” also signal stages of the argument. However, progression within the body paragraphs is uneven: the first moves from social media to cultural change and then to travel without clearly connecting each point, while the second shifts from when different clothes are necessary to traditional dress at festivals. Some references, including “this” in “This global fashion,” are not fully clear, and ideas about losing tradition recur without adding much development. Give each paragraph one main purpose, arrange its supporting explanation and example in a clear sequence, and use linking phrases to show the relationship between ideas rather than simply mark a new point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “global fashion trends,” “social media,” “brands,” “traditional dress” and “customs,” which makes the subject clear. There are also attempts at less common phrasing, such as “inculcate those trends,” but this is not a natural collocation in this context. Repetition of “influenced,” “fashion” and “tradition” limits the range, and several word-choice or spelling errors—such as “inluence,” “differnt” and “wera”—make the writing less fluent and can distract the reader. Aim for more precise expressions, for example “adopt trends,” “cultural clothing” and “international brands,” and proofread carefully. A wider range of accurate collocations would help express the causes and consequences more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a sentence beginning “In these days” and a complex example about a married couple travelling abroad. However, complex sentences are often difficult to control, and errors occur frequently enough to interrupt smooth reading. For example, “individuals travel … and gets influenced” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “this cause different issues” also needs agreement. The sentence beginning “Furthermore” is incomplete in its construction, and “in a adverse way” shows an article error. Work on building one complete main clause before adding subordinate information, and check subject–verb agreement, articles and punctuation. More accurate control of these patterns would make your ideas easier to follow.

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