Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-15
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
if adays, global fashion has become an important part of peoples lives.Many people follow fashion trends because of social media and the internet. is a topic at the center of many discussions. while some people think that social media is on of the main reasons why global fashion has become so popular.Many people follow celebrities and fashion influencers instagram and tiktok, others just believe that following global fashion trends is not necessary in our daily lives.
This controversy comes fome tha fact that each group of people sees things frome adiffernt point of view.
As far as i am concerned,i think that is global fashion has both advantages and sisadvantages.One important advantage is that people have more choices when buying clothes.
On one hand, a group of people agree that some times fashion its something beautiful in our lives.They say that attractive overall appearance of the community.Also, they add that so important for the reputation of the community.In addition, they see that it stems frome culture by through beautiful and luxurious clothing. fimally, they explain that among societal priorties.
on other hand, a second group of people just believe that is not necessary it can be better in some cases. they support their idea by saying that
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
You identify social media and the internet as reasons global fashion has become influential, and you state that it has both advantages and disadvantages. However, the task is addressed only minimally: the explanation of how trends spread is brief, and the positive or negative judgement is not made clear. The discussion of appearance, reputation and culture is difficult to connect to a developed position, while the final opposing point stops before its supporting reason is given. The response also does not meet the required minimum length, which limits how fully you can explain and support your ideas. To improve, answer both questions directly, choose a clear overall view, and develop each main point with an explanation and a relevant example.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
There is an attempt to organise the response using an opening, a statement of opinion and contrast markers such as “On one hand” and “on other hand.” These give the reader some indication that different views will be discussed. However, ideas are not arranged in a coherent progression: the opening repeats the point about social media, then introduces a controversy without clearly explaining the opposing positions. Several sentences are incomplete or disconnected, particularly the claims about community reputation and societal priorities, and the final paragraph ends abruptly. Use one paragraph for the causes and another for your evaluation, with each paragraph developing a clear central idea. Ensure that linking phrases connect complete, logically related sentences rather than standing in for explanation.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “global fashion trends,” “fashion influencers,” “attractive overall appearance” and “culture,” so the reader can recognise the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “follow celebrities and fashion influencers instagram,” “stems frome culture by through,” and “among societal priorties.” Spelling errors, including “differnt,” “fome” and “priorties,” also make the writing less clear. Build a more accurate set of phrases for discussing influence, consumer choices and cultural identity, and check spelling carefully. Aim to use familiar vocabulary precisely before attempting more elaborate expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a contrast between people who follow trends and those who do not. However, the range is very limited in practice, and frequent errors in sentence formation and punctuation can distort meaning. For example, “is a topic at the center of many discussions” has no clear subject, and “while some people think…” is left as a fragment. There are also problems with articles, agreement and sentence boundaries, as in “that is global fashion has both advantages and sisadvantages.” Capitalisation and spacing after punctuation are inconsistent. Practise writing complete subject–verb sentences, then combine related ideas with accurate conjunctions; proofread each sentence for a clear subject, verb and ending.
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