Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Fashion play an important role in everydays life now a days.People are every concious about new fashion trends. Mostly people aspects the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion.It actually a question how has fashion become an influence on people's lives globally. However, I strongly agree with this notion fashion has become positive influence on people lives globally. because, it gives confidences and make feel comfortable.

There are multiple reasons of daily life about why people are following globle fashion trends. Firstly, by following the global trend people feel confident. they think it gives a chance to live their life on global standerd, as well as to feel comfortable life when some is following the globle trend and attend a party their they feel confident when they are standing or chatting with some one. actually, it can help us to meet the public mental demand which they want to accept from us now a days.

Secondly, by following the global trend of fashion I believe that people can make themselves looking good. For example if we follow the new trends of global fashion that can be help us in make our personality boost. like Feeling good and looking good I was in the family function and wearing traditional dress on the other hand all others are wearing suite that time I realise that how it is important to follow global trends and becauce it can give a change to change our personality and boost it by the help of following global trends. Moreover, It can give a chance to understant the new fashion trends in the world and experience.

To conclude this essay. in my opinion on fashion is trends plays very importat role in our daily life as well as to give a chance to make our personality change and feel good as well as looking good.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear overall opinion that global fashion is positive, and you offer relevant reasons: it may increase confidence and help people feel that they look good. The family-function example also attempts to illustrate the effect of clothing on your feelings. However, the response only partially answers the task because it explains benefits more than how global fashion became such a strong influence. The role of social media, celebrities, advertising, or international brands is not discussed. Several points remain general or unclear, such as “meet the public mental demand,” and the example does not fully explain how global trends influenced your choice. Develop both the causes of fashion’s influence and your evaluation with clearer, specific support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “Firstly” and “Secondly,” and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify your main points about confidence and appearance. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow, particularly in the long sentence beginning “I was in the family function,” where several ideas run together. Some linking phrases are repetitive or do not show the relationship clearly, and the conclusion largely repeats earlier claims rather than bringing the argument together. Use shorter, more clearly organised sentences, and make each paragraph develop one main idea with a specific explanation or example. Clearer references between sentences would also improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “global fashion trends,” “personality,” “confident,” and “traditional dress,” so the general subject is understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning unclear. For example, “people aspects the way people dress” does not express the intended idea, while “make our personality boost” and “feel comfortable life” are unnatural combinations. Spelling errors such as “globle,” “standerd,” and “understant” are also noticeable. Build a more precise set of expressions for discussing influence and appearance, and check spelling and common word partnerships. This would make your ideas easier to understand and more appropriate for an academic essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “when,” and “if.” However, control is weak: errors are frequent, and some sentences are difficult to interpret. Examples include “Fashion play an important role,” “it gives confidences,” and “people can make themselves looking good,” which show problems with agreement, verb patterns, and sentence construction. Punctuation and capitalisation also interfere with readability, as in “Firstly, by following the global trend people feel confident. they think…” The long example sentence combines several clauses without clear grammatical boundaries. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time, checking subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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