Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The modern era has so many developments and trends which are accepted by people and time to time it will become modern day fashion.

Fashion is essential like the food and so many people like the stylish dress. These progression dress style has hard impact on the rich and poor life. Rich people buy all expensive and liking dress for them. Manymore, these global fashion become a powerful influence on the life of people. They think these are crucial in their life and with that perspective humanity forget the other choices and basic necessary of life.As we know that basic important things in life are food, living place and Clothes. Thats a reason everyone has right to own any kind of dress they afford . Further they have great impact on every up and down society. I think that they have both positive and negative development. Positive development is people change them up to date and move with the advanced civilisation but the negative is that some people not have enough source of income to transform themselves into that modern civilisation and they see other with having all needs become jealous and make a anger in their heart which come in result of crime. For example in Poor countries like Pakistan people have suffers with tha basic need of food and their children demanding high budget dresses trigger the crime

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both questions by suggesting that fashion trends influence people’s choices and by giving a mixed view of their effects. The contrast between people who can afford fashionable clothes and those who cannot is relevant, and the example of families in Pakistan begins to support your concern about financial pressure. However, the explanation of how global fashion became influential is very limited: you mention modern developments and trends but do not explain channels such as social media, advertising, or international brands. Your position that the development has both positive and negative effects is stated, but the positive side is only briefly described. The response is also 20 words below the required minimum. Develop each part with clearer reasons and specific examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic line of thought: fashion is influential, it can help people feel modern, and it can also create pressure for those with limited means. The use of “For example” signals an attempt to support a point. However, ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and several different points run together in long stretches, making the progression difficult to follow. Connections such as “Further” and “Thats a reason” do not clearly show how one idea follows from another, while the shift from basic needs to fashion’s social effects is abrupt. Organise the response into an introduction, separate paragraphs explaining the influence and evaluating its effects, and a conclusion. Use linking phrases only where they clarify the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “global fashion,” “powerful influence,” “advanced civilisation,” and “basic need.” These phrases show an effort to discuss social effects rather than relying only on simple descriptions. However, the range is limited, and inaccurate word choice or collocation sometimes makes meaning unclear. For example, “these progression dress style” and “all expensive and liking dress” are difficult to interpret, while “make a anger” is not a natural expression. Spelling and word forms such as “Manymore,” “tha,” and “clothes” used inconsistently also affect clarity. Build a more precise set of topic phrases and check that nouns, adjectives, and common word combinations are used naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response includes some attempts to connect clauses, for example, “Positive development is people change them up to date and move with the advanced civilisation but the negative is that…” This shows an effort to express contrast and cause and effect. However, sentence structures are often incomplete or inaccurately formed, and errors frequently make relationships between ideas hard to understand. Examples include “it will become modern day fashion,” “people has suffers,” and “their children demanding,” where verb forms and agreement are not controlled. Several sentences also run together without appropriate punctuation, particularly the long sentence beginning “I think that they have both positive and negative development.” Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and punctuation to express one clear idea at a time.

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