Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This is negative development in our society . This would not be happen or come in Musllim countries .But unfourtunately it happens in our own country . And unfourtunately people adopt it as a great trend and thinks that they are looking nice or attractive .And basically I do not think so . This is very bad to adopt these fashion trends .People looks there around and adopt these fashion this is because they think that those people are looking attractive .People of today adopt the global fashion trends which is not made for Musllim countries.But They do this just of looking nice as they think.Especially the actors of today make these bad fashions and comes in frount of media and show these bad fashion to there followers and there followers blindly follows them. This is the best example of strong influence on peoples lives .As well as there followrs other people also follows them blindly .People of today does not use there on brain while addopting these fashion trends .People follows these trends at there family functions ,there marriage ,there parties etc.And that event people watch them and then use their ideas on there own functions as well as events.Fashion makes people fool or blind they never think wheather it is good or bad or wheather it is according to our religion or not.They just do this for looking attractive and also to show people that we are brand .this is very bad to follow them blindly .We just use our own brain what is gfood or bad.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear negative view, especially in “This is very bad to adopt these fashion trends,” and you identify celebrities and their followers as a way trends spread. However, the response only partially answers the question. It focuses mainly on condemning fashion and does not explain in enough detail how global trends become influential—for example, through social media, advertising, or international brands. The claim that these fashions are unsuitable for Muslim countries is repeated, but not supported with a specific example or developed reasoning. To strengthen the response, explain the causes of fashion’s influence and then support your judgement with a clear, relevant example and a fuller explanation of its effects.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response stays broadly on the topic, and there is a recognisable line of thought: people copy celebrities, then others copy them at social events. However, ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, so the reader has difficulty seeing an introduction, explanation, and conclusion. Many sentences repeat the same point, such as people following trends “blindly,” and links such as “And,” “But,” and “As well as” are often used mechanically or do not show the relationship between ideas clearly. Group related points into paragraphs and use a more deliberate sequence: explain how trends spread, give an example, then assess whether this influence is positive or negative.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “global fashion trends,” “followers,” “attractive,” and “brand,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “bad,” “fashion,” and “follow.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice problems, including “Musllim,” “unfourtunately,” “frount,” and “addopting,” which make the writing less clear and controlled. Some expressions are unnatural, such as “show these bad fashion to there followers.” Build a wider set of accurate terms for influence and clothing, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most of the writing uses simple sentence patterns, with occasional attempts to connect ideas using “because” and “while.” These attempts show some range, but control is weak and errors occur frequently. For example, “This would not be happen” has an incorrect verb form, while “people adopt it … and thinks” has faulty subject–verb agreement. “People looks” and “their followers blindly follows them” show similar agreement problems. Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “This is negative development in our society .” Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them into longer sentences using correctly formed clauses and consistent punctuation.

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