Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In a modern world, numerous individual dress today are influenced by global fashion trends. In this time wear good and fancy dress are show the honour and wealth of individual. There are many positive and negative impact of this fashion but I think postive development are outweigh than negative developments.
On the one hand, we tallk about about the benefits of wearing fashionable dresses that are influenced by global fashion.Moreover, wearing dress influenced from social media.For example, many people can see dress online and i they like this dress so they order it and this dress. In addition, wearing a good and favorite dress are very effective for individual life. For example, it can increase the dopamine level of your mind and feel you good and happy.
On the other hand, there are also many negeative impact of wearing dress influenced by global fashion trends. Firstly, these dresses are ver costly. For example, if you influenced from an actor dress and you want to wear this same so it is very expensive all people cannot afford this. Secondly, it can elminate our forefather culture.For example, if we wear clothes according global fashion so it can finish our tradional clothes and have impact on our culture.
In conclusion, wearing good dress are beneficial and may have many negative impacts on individuals life but it depend on numerous factors. From my perspective, I strongly believe that positive developments are outweigh than negative developments because it helps to stay happy and feel relax.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
You give a clear overall opinion that the development is positive, and you include both benefits and drawbacks, such as feeling happier in fashionable clothes and the cost or cultural effects. However, the task is only partially addressed: the question asks how global fashion became influential, but your explanation is limited mainly to seeing clothes on social media. The supporting points are also brief and sometimes unclear, so the reader gets little explanation of how these effects operate. The response is 242 words, which is 8 words below the required minimum; the 8 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To strengthen the response, explain the influence more fully—for example, the role of celebrities, advertising, and online shopping—and develop each reason with a specific, clear example.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for advantages and disadvantages, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help readers identify the stages of your argument. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and some links are mechanical or unclear. For instance, “For example” introduces points that are not fully explained, while “so they order it and this dress” makes the sequence difficult to follow. The conclusion repeats the main opinion without bringing the reasons together. Use clearer links between cause and effect, and organise each body paragraph around one main point followed by explanation and a relevant example.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some task-related vocabulary, including “global fashion trends,” “social media,” “expensive,” and “culture,” so the main topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors make the writing less clear or natural. Examples include “numerous individual dress,” “fancy dress,” “elminate our forefather culture,” and “positive developments are outweigh.” Repetition of “dress” and “impact” also restricts precision. Build a wider set of accurate expressions for fashion and its influence, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise choices such as “clothing,” “fashionable outfits,” and “traditional clothing” would help communicate your ideas more clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
You attempt a few longer structures, including “if you influenced from an actor dress and you want to wear this same,” and use basic connectors to form sentences. However, the range of sentence patterns is very limited, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction sometimes distort meaning. For example, “wearing a good and favorite dress are very effective” has faulty agreement, while “positive developments are outweigh” uses an incorrect verb form. The sentence about ordering a dress online is also structurally incomplete and difficult to interpret. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses with “because,” “although,” or “if.” Check that subjects and verbs agree and that each sentence has a complete, clear structure.
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