Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There are a lot of trends in the market but clothing is major one. Nowadays, way of wearing clothes attracted by global fashion trends because clothes are easy to buy and advertisements by famous people influence their audience. I think this is a negative development. This eassay will discuss both reasons and whats the negative effect on individuals live.

On the one hand people wear cothes influenced by global fashion trends. There are many ways attract people to new trends. Firstly, there are a lot of advertisements on the street sides and in the shopping complexes is the big reason people attract to new clothes. Secondly, individuals like to wear clothes same like their favorite celebrity. For instance, audience watch their favourite person to wear new clothes it goes up in trending and people purchase new clothes even they already have clothes.

It is negative development it increases the consumerism because most of the time people get bore with clothes which they have and buy new. It makes people financially very weak in the upcoming period in the various ways. Because spent money unnecessarily is not good and also it is time wasted activity such as, young people spent their valuable time to follow trend rather than concentrate on their own carrier and development of new skills.

In conclusion, individuals get attract to buy new trendy clothes from adverstisements and from person whom they like so much. However, it has negative effects such as increase consumerism and wastage of time instead of concentrate on carrier and development new skills which make people financially weak in future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both parts of the prompt: you explain that advertising and celebrities help global fashion spread, and you clearly state that you see this as negative. The examples of street-side and shopping-complex advertisements, and people copying a favourite celebrity, are relevant. You also identify consequences, including consumerism, financial pressure and time spent following trends. However, some points are asserted rather than fully explained. For example, the link between buying clothes and becoming “financially very weak” would be more convincing with a clearer explanation or a specific example. The point about young people neglecting career development is relevant but receives limited support. Develop these ideas further and make the explanation of how global trends reach people more precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph explaining influences, a paragraph on negative effects, and a conclusion. The progression from causes to consequences is easy to follow, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “In conclusion” help guide the reader. At times, however, linking is mechanical, and some connections between ideas are not fully clear. For instance, the sentence beginning “Because spent money unnecessarily” does not connect smoothly to the preceding point, while the conclusion repeats the main ideas without adding a concise synthesis. Use a wider range of natural transitions and make each paragraph’s internal links explicit, so the reasoning flows rather than relying mainly on sequencing words.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “global fashion trends,” “advertisements,” “consumerism,” and “financially weak,” so the main ideas are generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems make the writing less natural. Examples include “clothes is major one,” “same like their favorite celebrity,” “get bore with clothes,” and “carrier” where you mean career. There are also misspellings such as “eassay,” “cothes,” and “adverstisements.” Build a more precise set of phrases for describing influence and consumption, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More accurate collocations would make your argument clearer and more fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the overall meaning can usually be followed. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with articles, agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction. For example, “clothing is major one” needs an article, and “way of wearing clothes attracted by global fashion trends” lacks a correctly formed verb structure. In “people get bore with clothes,” the verb form is incorrect; “people spent their valuable time” also needs a form consistent with the general present-tense argument. The sentence beginning “Because spent money unnecessarily” is incomplete. Practise building accurate complex sentences and check that each sentence has a clear subject and finite verb, while maintaining consistent tense.

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