Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays, many individuals believe that there are numerous aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends. There are some advantages and disadvantages of this perspective. In this essay i will discuss both.
To biggen with, some individuals think about it can positive impact among people however there are some disadvantages. Firstly talking about advantages, global fashion trend rapidly increased across the world, while some countries organise some kind of events related to fashion show as a result many people influences to trending clothes. In addition they have roll model such as celebrity, they also wear this clothes cause people like to accept fashion trend.
On the other hand some are arguing that there are some disadvantages and it can make negative impact among people. Main thing is that designer clothes are costly. it need to pay high cost, many people can not affordable. Moreover it can reduce our culture, specially in India has a one clothes culture. Many people influence by celebrity and they accept foreign culture. For example in country- side people have there own dressing sense, some time they feel ashamed when they wear their clothes as a result they accept foreign culture and lost there own culture.
In conclusion, there are many advantages and disadvantages, however i personally believe that there are more advantages than disadvantages while people accept global fashion they can represent for country and it is also proud moment those who participate in competition of big stage that can impact on culture and country.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
You address both the influence of global fashion and whether it is positive or negative, and you give relevant points about celebrities, cost, and cultural change. However, the task asks how global fashion became influential, and this explanation is only briefly suggested through fashion events and celebrity role models. Your conclusion says the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, but the essay mainly develops disadvantages and does not clearly explain the claimed benefits, so the position is not consistently supported. The response is also 242 words, below the 250-word minimum; the 13 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop the causes and your chosen evaluation more fully, with specific examples and a consistent argument.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, with the advantages and disadvantages separated into different sections. Linking expressions such as “Firstly,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help signal the structure. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the first body paragraph moves from fashion events to celebrities without explaining the connection, while the final sentence introduces representing a country and competitions without preparing these ideas earlier. Some transitions are mechanical, and references such as “this clothes” and “they” make it difficult to identify exactly what is meant. To improve, organise each paragraph around one main point and use clearer links between the explanation and its example.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “global fashion trends,” “designer clothes,” “celebrity,” and “foreign culture,” which allows the reader to follow the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning unclear. For example, “biggen to with” appears to be an attempt at a sequencing phrase, and “many people influences to trending clothes” does not express the intended idea naturally. There are also spelling and word-form problems, such as “roll model” and “country- side.” Build a more accurate set of phrases for describing influence, affordability, and cultural identity, and check spelling and collocations when editing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a cause-and-effect structure with “as a result,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence construction, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation. For instance, “there are numerous aspects … are influenced” combines incompatible structures, while “it can positive impact” is missing a verb form. In “many people can not affordable,” the sentence pattern is also incomplete, and several sentences begin with lowercase “it” or “i.” Practise building accurate subject–verb sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check each sentence for a complete verb and correct punctuation.
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