Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Many reasons play an important role of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends however, these global fashion influence more on people lives, this have positive and negative development, I willd discuss both views and draw my conclusions.
The positive development and strong influence by global fashion trends on people lives firstly, many people need to fellow global fashion in their outlook such as wearing popular clothing brands like HM and Zara. Secondly, increasing the commerical and advertising and event attract people to fellow fashion collection for example, modeling event, tv programs focus on fashion models.Furthermore, many people believe is influenced of global fashion is part of modern society and increase the sense of satsifaction for them for instance, wearing luxury brand or wearing beautiful clothes based on fashion trends lead people feel more happy and part of the global society. These are the positive aspects of influence global fashion on people lives.
On the other hand, the negative aspects on influenced fashion trends on people lives, one of the main reason is create social gap between society classes for example, discrimination and judgmental espically between poor and rich.In addition is more benefit for fashion companies than people such as profits and sales. Moreove it increase the captlisim in the society for instance, focus on consumption and commerical more than production inside the community. These are the negative aspects of global fashion trends on people lives.
To sum up,eve the global fashion trends has many benefits on people lives, but I agree more with the negative development and influenced by global fashion trends on peole lives.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You address both parts of the question: you mention advertising, fashion events and the appeal of popular brands as sources of influence, then discuss social division and consumerism before stating that you view the development negatively. However, the response only partially fulfils the task because the explanation of how fashion became influential is brief, and several points are asserted rather than explained. For example, the claim that fashion creates a “social gap” would be stronger if you explained how expensive trends can exclude people who cannot afford them. Your final position is present, but the opening says you will discuss both views, which makes your stance less clear at first. Develop fewer ideas with specific explanation and examples.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for positive and negative effects, and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the main sections. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow, and linking phrases are repetitive or awkward. For instance, “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “Furthermore” introduce a list, but the ideas are not clearly connected or developed; the repeated closing sentences, “These are the positive aspects” and “These are the negative aspects,” add little. Some sentence boundaries are also unclear, particularly in the opening and around “fashion models.Furthermore.” Use clearer topic sentences, connect each example directly to its point, and vary or reduce formulaic transitions.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “global fashion trends,” “advertising,” “luxury brand,” “discrimination,” and “consumption.” This gives the response a basic range for discussing fashion and its effects. However, the range is limited and several word choices, collocations, and spelling errors make parts difficult to understand. Examples include “fellow global fashion” where you mean follow, “increase the sense of satsifaction,” and “captlisim.” Phrases such as “commercial and advertising and event” are also imprecise. Aim to use accurate topic-specific expressions and check spelling and word forms carefully; this will make your ideas clearer without requiring unnecessarily advanced vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt longer sentences and use some structures to give reasons and examples, such as “for instance” clauses and the contrast introduced by “On the other hand.” However, sentence construction is frequently faulty, and errors sometimes make the intended meaning hard to follow. The opening is a run-on sentence with unclear clause relationships: “Many reasons play an important role … however, these global fashion influence…” There are also problems with agreement and verb forms, as in “this have positive and negative development” and “the global fashion trends has.” Punctuation and spacing are inconsistent, including missing spaces after full stops. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using controlled subordinate clauses.
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