Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Fashion is the most considered topic of contemporary society, most of the people dressing sence influenced by global fashion trends .

Global fashion has wide spreaded by the mean of social media otherwise , we aren't able to see what is happeing in the other part of the world so people influence by trends. I think this is negative development because people forgotten their roots also they can become aspirational consumer.

Everyone should care about fashion however if individuals continues aopting internationally styles for example, promoting west culture in a muslim country where wearing abaya is a cultural value can cause degradation of their own cultre as a result famliy conflicts and critisism will increase.

Having siad that, cultural values and a basic code of conduct at any organization of instituion can be hurt ,so everyone should strike a balance between international trends and cultural aspects.

young people are becoming aspirational consumers because they try to copy a trend that they cannot afford for example, influencers over instagram or tiktok showoff their purchases e.g iphone or a luxary car which can cause mental and social anxiety. Although global fashion can improve people fashion style but can lack confidence .

Overall, social media has a great unfluenc on global fashion it can hurt traditional beliefs

howver to my opinion, this is cearly a negative development but modestry can also be improved by taking care of own cultural aspects.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear overall view that global fashion is a negative development, and you identify relevant effects: weakening cultural traditions, family conflict, and pressure to buy expensive products. However, the task asks both how global fashion became influential and whether this is positive or negative. The explanation of its influence is brief, mainly attributing it to social media, while the negative effects receive more attention and are not consistently explained with developed examples. The point about organizational dress codes is also introduced but not clearly connected to your argument. The response is 13 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to develop these ideas. Explain the role of social media and influencers more fully, then support each main effect with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: it introduces the topic, gives reasons for a negative view, and ends with a conclusion. Some progression is visible, particularly from social media’s influence to cultural and consumer effects. However, connections between ideas are sometimes unclear. For example, “Having said that” suggests a contrast, but the following point about cultural values and organizational conduct does not clearly contrast with the previous paragraph. The conclusion also repeats the negative position without bringing the main reasons together. Linking words such as “however,” “although,” and “as a result” are attempted, but their relationships are not always accurate. Give each body paragraph one clear focus and use transitions that show the precise relationship between its ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “global fashion trends,” “cultural values,” “aspirational consumers,” and “mental and social anxiety.” These choices show an effort to discuss both cultural identity and consumer pressure. However, spelling errors and inaccurate word forms are frequent enough to distract the reader, as in “wide spreaded,” “happeing,” “luxary,” and “unfluenc.” Some combinations are also unnatural or unclear, such as “the most considered topic” and “improve people fashion style.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations rather than using ambitious phrases without checking their form. Proofread spelling carefully and learn useful expressions as complete phrases, such as “influence people’s clothing choices” and “put pressure on consumers to keep up with trends.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional structure in “if individuals continue adopting international styles” and a concession beginning “Although global fashion…”. However, control is inconsistent, and errors often make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Examples include “most of the people dressing sense influenced,” “people forgotten their roots,” and “if individuals continues,” where sentence structure, verb form, or subject–verb agreement is faulty. Punctuation and sentence boundaries also need attention: the opening contains a full stop followed by a lower-case “global,” and several clauses are joined without clear punctuation. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement and punctuation before adding subordinate clauses.

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